Before I Go Blind

Before I Go Blind

A Poem by Neville
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5 7 5 form and true

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Before I Go Blind

 

Seize for me the sun

For I shall yet have the moons

Most fairest daughter

© 2019 Neville


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and I see the light, maybe just before i see nothing ever again.
but a good combo to see...quite the senryu here...
should "moons" be "moon's" possessive?
at any rate...and who is giving away those daughters, i might like to seize one of them, also.
j.

Posted 5 Years Ago


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Neville

5 Years Ago

thank you my friend... I will go check....... N



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Such a lovely senryu. The Moon's fairest daughter ,eh? Well might as well shoot for the stars! :). Lydi***

Posted 5 Years Ago


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Neville

5 Years Ago

It makes sense to aim high when vision aint what it used to be... thank you Lydi**.... Neville
Nev,
Sounds Like the Bard himself!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

5 Years Ago

I'm smiling from me pierced ear to the very other one on the opposite corner of my face :)
I get tripped up on senryu vs haiku but it makes no difference really. It's a delightful and clever poem.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

5 Years Ago

It's the thank you's that matter...many thank you's Ana..... Neville
Papaya

5 Years Ago

you are welcome :)
Neville

5 Years Ago

thank you :)
I see my friend Jacob already wondered about the moon's fairest daughters --- as I read it possessively as well -- I like this little word play.

Posted 5 Years Ago


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Neville

5 Years Ago

Thank you ever so Lyn... I feel fitfully indulged this fine sunny mane............ Neville
Neville, I applaud you. Technically correct haiku with true substance, something rarely read. And, the perfect title.

Posted 5 Years Ago


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Neville

5 Years Ago

thank you kindly sir.. I am more than made up with your encouraging comments.... cheers, Neville
Passionate and beautiful declaration, Neville. Your pristine Senryu reaches out and grabs the reader’s attention and heart. We feel the need, the urgency in your dramatic words. Blinded by the light...of love- yes, and absolutely true!

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Neville

5 Years Ago

I am truly honoured by your visit Annette and can't thank you enough for your lovely comments... ble.. read more
and I see the light, maybe just before i see nothing ever again.
but a good combo to see...quite the senryu here...
should "moons" be "moon's" possessive?
at any rate...and who is giving away those daughters, i might like to seize one of them, also.
j.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

5 Years Ago

thank you my friend... I will go check....... N
Oh how I love this Haiku! So poetic in its declaration. Awesome words N! Nice to see you after such time.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

5 Years Ago

You are most kind, thank you DIVYA... Neville
AYVID N

5 Years Ago

You’re most welcome N. I’m so happy to see you 😀
Neville

5 Years Ago

then I am just gonna go thank you again :)
Delectable enjambment there at moons. I can’t resist a good enjambment. I like the way the title prepares us for something desperate but then the poem lulls with the softness of all that power and beauty of nature. A mean haiku here.

Posted 5 Years Ago


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Neville

5 Years Ago

I am truly honoured my friend, and then some....Neville
This is an interesting & thought-provoking little tidbit. What I get most is POWERFUL! It feels like a lion roaring his decree! Love it! I've missed ya! We've both been a little flaky at times (((NUGS))) Fondly Margie

Posted 5 Years Ago


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Neville

5 Years Ago

Many thanks Margie, and much appreciated too.. NUG NUG... Neville

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