Lonely Winter Blues

We had one of our worst winters last year here in Australia. So where did I decide to move?.. That's right- England, for a second winter. I recently returned to Australia for a third winter in a row..

Cold stabbing at the skin

The frost won't stop bickering 

Rain, hail, snow - my old friends 

Hearing spring as it contends 

Blinding white staining the earth

Flakes falling, giving birth 

Winter breaths every affliction 

Its fatal demise, a sick addiction 

Resurrect a dying season 

For it holds no reason 

Whispering wise words 

Of winter's cold curse   

Reviews

[eglantine]

This poem is very reflective of the circle of life. Winter is generally associated with the lack of life but then you use "giving birth" and "breaths" and "resurrect" contrasted with "fatal demise, a sick addiction" "dying season" There is def something here, melting off the tongue of the lines. Well done.

[Polaroid Impossible]

Thanks very much. My writing often is often either personified or written in a story structured format. I find it interesting how we construct our lives based upon these two forms. Thanks for reading :)

[Neon]

I love the Rhyme ... poem's nicely penned.

[Red Brick Keshner]

In all its powering up along the lines and couplets the strongest and most telling are the last two stanzas. If we have disposed ears we shall indeed hear the wisdom whispered by the scourge of a frozen ecosystem. Wonderful and powerful poem. Thanks for sharing it with us.

[rnuff]

Deep and worth the pondering thoughts, like the rhyming pattern

[Lost in Wonderland]

This poem portrays winter beautifully, well worded with amazing personification. Awesome job!

[ewest1220]

Very well done I absolutely love the tone you use when writing. Resurrect a dying season, for it holds no reason. Almost a sinister singsong fashion to these lines great job!

[Willowtree]

This gives winter a different view! I like the adjectives you used: "a fatal demise, a sick addiction". Sounds like you had a harsh experience in England! Great poem:)

[selkietales]

I like this a lot :) one thing, did you mean breaths or breathes? Because looked more like the latter fit better to me.

[Trixolomanea]

It's beautiful, really... the rhythm is really nice and flowing. :)

I especially liked:
"Blinding white staining the earth
Flakes falling, giving birth " brilliant usage of words!

Well done!

[Satori]

Nicely done. You managed to capture the desolate nature of winter and yet it vibrates with the tension of being in a holding pattern waiting to break free.

[Lee]

The cold can indeed be harsh and sting deep through skin and bones. You captured the essence of this season well and the emotion, or rather your dislike for such cold, is melted inbetween the words and wrapped throughout. ( "Giving Birth" seemed a tad contradictory to what you were saying however. It caught me off guard, a surprising description.. and then later to say "Resurrect a dying season for it holds no reason" surprised me once more. )

I would have liked to have seen a few more stanzas though. There is a feeling of incompleteness. Like it's not yet finished...

[Polaroid Impossible]

Perhaps metaphorically portraying the never-ending Winter that won't cease! :)

[Lee]

haha nice :)