Black Is Her Heart

..Black Is Her Heart!..

Do you see the pain in my eyes?
Do you see the pain in your lies?
Your heart is as black as an oil well
Your actions are from the pit of hell
You reached in and twisted my heart inside out
I did not even have time to shout
I wish you could see what's inside me
Oh how I wish you could really see
That I am more than a distant memory
Oh how I wish you could kiss me
Instead I am written as a distant memory
Oh how I wish we could be..
Friends instead of this misery
Instead I am written as a bitter memory
Oh how I wish this was just a story
The first cut is always the deepest
But it has left me speechless
So I say goodbye and farewell
I bought what you had to sell
A cell locked inside hell
Oh how I wish you could see
This love and pain locked inside me
Oh how I wish you could see
What's really inside me
Oh how I wish you could see..

Reviews

[J.Black]

"Do you see the pain in my eyes?
Do you see the pain in your lies?
Your heart is as black as an oil well
Your actions are from the pit of hell
You reached in and twisted my heart inside out
I did not even have time to shout
I wish you could see what's inside me
Oh how I wish you could really see" --- full of emotion, a striking pain to the heart, and it's real and pure.

This was a wonderful write, I can honestly saw I can relate which I like.

[Indigoshadows]

Very powerful. Painful. So much I want to say about this but can't.

[Lyrical Love]

Lovely written piece. Very dark and rhythmic, creating images that are very vivid.
This reminds me of the old film that has the smokey setting and the music playing that leads you to know that someone is going to die!

[BUTTers]

i love it, the emotion is raw and so real
zA~

[lAcEy_LoO's Poems Site]

Your heart is as black as an oil well
Your actions are from the pit of hell
You reached in and twisted my heart inside out
I did not even have time to shout
I wish you could see what's inside me

thats what id like to say to my exs becuase they hurt me and i know what its like! a great poem that i can relate to!

[Marvin Lewis Jr.]

This was an amazing poem.
I like the imagery, the wordplay, the structure and the rhythm was very polished.
It takes skill to write a poem of this sort and it not become chaotic or difficult to understand. You possess that skill.
A beautifully written and thought-provoking write!

I really enjoyed reading.

[.]

"Oh how I wish we could be..
Friends instead of this misery
Instead I am written as a bitter memory
Oh how I wish this was just a story
The first cut is always the deepest
But it has left me speechless
So I say goodbye and farewell"

A mixture of pain and anger... i enjoyed it

Wonderfully written!!!

[darkgurl]

Do you see the pain in my eyes?
Do you see the pain in your lies?
Your heart is as black as an oil well
Your actions are from the pit of hell

Ouch, such torment and anger, love this write, very well written....Kim

[~Mary Ann~]

Ouch! This is my first instinct to your write. I like the way you weaved what was wanted the outcome to be and the reality of what happened. This flows quite well while illustrating both the opposite ends of feeling the love and the pain all at the same time.

Well done! :)