Sway

shall we dance

Dance with me
please
hold me close
sway with me
bone to bone
arms around
waist
arms around
neck
sway

Let the music take us
to another
realm
just you
me
swaying

Not too close
when we are alone
then
we will fall into
each others skin

For now
just need you
holding me
dance me
and sway
with me

Stay

Author's Note

restoration .. my mind is numb so no poems or stories come .. they are sleeping

Reviews

[Blackbirdsong]

I can almost hear and feel the rhythm of the music in this one. I really love the inner thoughts of the speaker. The flirty way she's like come here, but not too close. Later. That's the way to control a man. Besides they love it when we take command like that. lol

Good read. :)

[Benarsi]

I love the calm simplicity of this; peaceful and soothing. :) Beautiful word choices and flow, love the vertical feel of this and its unique style, filled with imagery that makes me want to go back to Sevilla and dance a tango. :) I agree with the other reviewers who have already mentioned that this would be great as a song...:)

B.

[Gandré]

awww...you didn't send me this! This is your best poem ever. It has got almost an instrumental even a vocal sound, so written, so short and it is showing us that happiness is made by those small details; they are based on weaving the reality together with the image of the moment

congrat on having a featureed poem, my dear.

[Julian]

Only a fool would not want to "sway" like this. Nicely written.

[Juanita]

This is beautiful. I love the ending.

[Manny Lopez]

good

[V]

Chloe,
The need of this poem is so clear. Almost an urgency, all tied up in a dance of intimacy. It is so visual... no, it goes beyond that, the words make me feel that skin, that sway, that dance.
Thanks, I really liked it.
V.

[Lionel Braud]

The rhythmic appeal is appropriate, the content and the format work well together. the feels like a swaying.

[Gary H]

This has a great feel to it - sorry if that sounds humerous for a poem about dancing close together. I like the way you have used single words to express lines and give the reader the chance to piece together the images. We all dance/sway in different ways so I think your idea works well. There's also a sensual feeling that I get from it. Mmmmmm. Very enjoyable and makes me want to dance now......which at 6.30am is not such a good thing!

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

---I love this getaway wanting feeling of love, security,

---mimi

[Jasmina Amethyst Pendra..]

Ooh I really like this one. It reminds me of how careful my hubby and I would be to not let our emotions show too much...or our lust for that matter.

Not too close
when we are alone
then
we will fall into
each others skin

This was my favorite part. I am so in love with poem Chloe. Good job my friend!
~Liv