Sway

shall we dance

Dance with me
please
hold me close
sway with me
bone to bone
arms around
waist
arms around
neck
sway

Let the music take us
to another
realm
just you
me
swaying

Not too close
when we are alone
then
we will fall into
each others skin

For now
just need you
holding me
dance me
and sway
with me

Stay

Author's Note

restoration .. my mind is numb so no poems or stories come .. they are sleeping

Reviews

[Blackbirdsong]

I can almost hear and feel the rhythm of the music in this one. I really love the inner thoughts of the speaker. The flirty way she's like come here, but not too close. Later. That's the way to control a man. Besides they love it when we take command like that. lol

Good read. :)

[Crystal L. Test]

Here were my favorite lines:

sway with me
bone to bone

These struck me because the word "swaying" for me would be a slight, laid-back movement. Something comfortable and intimate. But "bone to bone" seems the opposite. Very hard and intense. It made me think that you'd be holding each other so tightly that your flesh would merge so that your bones would actually be touching. Great visual!

Thanks for sharing. :)

[~Sorcha~]

This flowed really well, and the emotion is evident. I think this is really beautiful. Makes me miss my boyfriend even more though, hehe. I really liked this a lot. The repition brought out the voice and the emotions better, and made it more appealing in a way. Keep up the beautiful work.

[Matthew]

This was a beautiful write Chloe. This had a great flow and feelng to it.

Great write!

[TL Boehm]

every once in awhile - amongst the tsunamis, the vortices, the abysses...some one posts a gentle rivulet of a poem. A breeze, a balm...a whisper. And here's one right now. I too liked the simplicity and the 'honesty' of this one. peace.

[Brother Wolf]

Is there a purer form of intimay? I think not. To sway, to feel the warm, to feel two hearts beating as one, not is competition but in unison.........Ah, now that's what's it's all about.

Delightful, warm and pure.

[Guitargirl]

i can understand sort of where youre coming from
i can see this in a movie or video
i like your kind of thinking
oh, sense were friends now,
dont die before i do ok?....

[Jaime Luthe]

I can definitely see this in song form! I can even see the video!
GREAT JOB
PEACE n INK

[An Ordinary Woman]

I like this Chloe, and I agree with Gary D. Gregory and the others that is would be great put to music.
I like the flow, the simplicity, and the passion it holds. ... makes me wanna dance !
The message is awesome too. Very nice poem.
Thank you for sharing!

[The Random Writings Of ..]

This is a good piece, I like that I can visualize myself dancing under the stars,

Let the music take us
to another
realm
just you
me
swaying

I really like this part. Its like when you just get lost in someone.
Great job!
Kates