Fallen Behind

Another haiku popped into my head, but I like the previous one better.

Spring is coming forth,

to people's joy,

yet I linger in darkness...

Author's Note

Be honest. This one doesn't seem like anything special to me, but I read somewhere that traditional haiku poems often have something to do with seasons, so I thought I'd give it a shot.

Reviews

[IAmGhost120]

I think you did well with this format. I've written a lot of untraditional haikus, too. But I feel if you understand the beauty of haiku, then I think you can change it around. As long as you get your meaning across and it flows, it works. I feel like you understand haiku, and I like what you've done. Great.

[Mockingbird]

even if it isn't 5--7-5, it's still a nice piece. i wouldn't change anything about it.

[Mockingbird]

simple and succinct. some people anticipate the new life of springtime while others dread it because or the despair they feel. great poem.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Simple and effective, well done, good read.

[Kara]

I love the meaning behind it. however this haiku is written to a 5-4-7 syllable count. other than that its beautiful

[A Red Red Rose 4 U Luv]

Not as deep as your other one, but still pretty good :)