Torn Pages

Memory delete ......

Torn Pages

Once upon a love

You wrote your words

Across my hapless heart

All lines a caress

Each paragraph held hope

Messages were kept alive

I keep a diary

Of all your promises

Believing in your truths

Penned in golden ink

A record of ardour

Read over and again

‘Twas not to be

You hide a secret

I could not see

This day of shock

Came all to soon

You found another’s favour

So I tore out

The good time pages

Throwing into burning fire

Phillozofee @ 2017

Author's Note

Someone mentioned my words were too complicated - so I'm trying a very sparingly short lined write ... :-)

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Re. your Author's note: Why dilute the YOU in your writing. If you wrote a nursery rhyme you'd turn it into an epic because you can.. and that's what is expected of you.

As to your poem - disillus ionment is a sadness that runs through life as a Summer's ros y day runs into an Autumnal flood. Surely one's diary is a book of spell s - warts,toad s and all - then, used til one recalls THE spells forgotten! Perhaps.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Just a one off - I can assure you ... and yes ... a dairy is personal and must contain both the good and bad happenstances we all encounter - thanks for your supportive review ... :-)

[Phill Oz O'fee]

dairy ... what was I typing ... meant diary ... or was there some 'Freudian' slip up within the text back .... :-)

[emmajoy]

Perhaps just buttering up your reviewers.. cheesy you! Running for the hills now..

[J.J. NIGHTINGALE]

LOL..............:)............................

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Lets have a group "HUG" .... I feel much better now! :-)

[emmajoy]

Laughing! Now to step into glorious Darzet sunshine!

[Ardra]

You wrote your words
Across my hapless heart

mmmm many a times... happens they write and forget what they were writing hehe :)
sad but very relatable poem.. :)

[Suchita]

I can imagine the heartbreak but love if true can return in time. simply composed yet good.

lovely writing style

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and maybe the remnants of the words burned in that fire might light another fire.
good times, bad times...leftover ashes of the past.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

An excellent condensed version of you Phill, but I miss and prefer the original version...my opinion, that said, eloquent and dramatic poem- the "record of ardour" transfigured by a lover's betrayal, well and passionately penned. We burn the pages, but the memories linger...Yes!

[Stella Armour]

I agree, you should write in your own natural way , not in the way others dictate.
And the poem... oh so sad, torn pages and a torn heart.
They say that to throw hurt and anxiety into a fire , whether real or imagined is very healing... it helps you to move on and leave the ashes behind..

[J.J. NIGHTINGALE]

Some times don't last
Some lives won't mesh
Some ink..bleeds
Some hearts grow cold...

Interesting.......:)....

Jazzy

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Some times so true ...
Thank you for your review .... :-)

[J.J. NIGHTINGALE]

You are welcome...:).....