Did it hurt..?!

Him: "Did it hurt...?"

Her: "Did what hurt...?

Him: "When you fell from Heaven..."

Her: "Aww Kevin..."

Him: "Because your face is really f****d up......"

Her: "Umm, that wasn't funny..."

Him: "Sorry honey" :-)

Her: "......It really wasn't funny..."

Him: "Good thing I keep my day job and save my money..."

Her: "Why do you always do that...???"

Him: "Huh, what was that...???"

Her: "Why are you making a rhyme to everything I say...?"

Him: [Turns and looks away] ;-)

Reviews

[Siena - Silent Awakenin..]

Awwh this was a sweet poem, and had a clever twist at the end... the way the description of his actions ryhmed were cool. Hmm i liked the way it was humerous, and not serious... like most of my poems :/ pha i really want to write some fun ones but im finding it hard. You're ma inspiration now, pha ;)

[WhiteWillow]

Cute the first time I read it, clever, the second. Well done!

[SkinlessFrank]

I'd like to hear this one acted out on the stage by Louis Armstrong and Ella Fitzgerald. Make you need to write the music too.

[Renee]

What a wonderful scene stealer this is. Primed and ready for the stage, I'd say. Excellently composed. I thought it was funny, the kind of dry humor I love about my husband. Oh, and nice rhyme scheme, truly!

Much Respect ♥
Renee

[nostal]

S**t is tight.

[Leia Starshine]

*chuckles* ... you can only smile when reading this

[.]

LOL - you made me smile :)

[Sukriti Suki]

Nice one....funny.

[DearSweetAgony]

This is a cool write, I don't think anyone can read this without smiling.

[Tkess]

I agree, can't read it without a smile. i thought it was going a completely different direction until the "Because your face is really f****d up" part. Good stuff.

[hopelessromantic]

lolz i love it its different