Walking through Fire

 

 

I will through fire for you.

Just to see you face

Even as my flesh begin to burn and smell

I will not stop, because I can’t imagine my life without you.

So I will keep walking just see you smile and to hear you laugh

I walk through fire and let everything burn  

Author's Note

please ignore the grammar mistakes

Reviews

[alesuriko]

Reminded me of "Walk through the Fire" by Joss Whedon in "Once More With Feeling" Buffy the Vampire Slayer S7/Ep6. Good use of emotion, it was well displayed and the imagery is both beautiful and grim, well done. I wish I could ignore those grammar mistakes... but I can't, I'm an editor and I think it's a good thing when people point out those mistakes because it furthers you as a writer so...

In the second line you should have "your face" instead of "you face." And in the third line, "begin" should be plural = "begins".

Overall, a very decent poem, well done!

[Desiree B.]

Your poem says a lot about giving up everything for the sake of love. You have a solid idea and premise and I like the symbol that the fire represents. :)

[DaturaBlossoms]

I can't ignore the grammar mistakes for the purposes of a fair review. It would have felt strong and powerful if not for the constant distraction of the grammar errors. Perhaps you should make the effort of improving your work instead of asking reviewers to ignore the mistakes.

[melissa]

Awsome poem love it

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I think this was very nicely written. I liked that you showed the girl you loved that you feel do anything for her. I think this was cute to. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Paradoxical]

powerful and interesting, I like it! good write!

[Voice]

Very nice!! Great Write!! :)

Voice

[Deepshikha]

It is very simple, but your use of imagery conveys a powerful feel.

[The Analog Kid]

This is decent man. You can write poems! Pretty solid for a short write. A but creepy!

[Senseless whatever]

Good sentiments. The write as a whole needs to be polished.