Dream

Thirst of rhyme

Ascending mind

And pen writes..

Facade of life

It is still

A push

When it needs

My hands are busy

Holding a gun,

Aiming to shoot

Straight at a dream

What is it?

Name it a bubble

Inside it, lives two bird

Encoding a password

Of happily ever after

Now..close your eyes

See! It’s “we”

Love is Breath

And we live in it

So don’t you think ?

A crystal light

Future,  worth it?

It can be a bubble dream

Hopeless

Scared to fight

Aren’t we?

“ But why” the question comes in between

When you promised

“Life”

We will never care about it .

 

 

 

Reviews

[Arsh]

"Love is Breath
And we live in it... " What a touching imagery you blow with love! Well, yeah.. sure.. love's breath and we all live within so, my breath's all in you.. & allow me to live in you. (My words~~for your heart)

Never-mind--beautiful poetry. I may claim, one of my fav. poems. indeed. I'm sure, you're in everyone's heart with having such a beauty (talent) in the bowl of your white hands. I`d like to be leafing through your pages more!

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thank you ,glad that u liked it :)

[Arsh]

Pleasure! Mind, if may I ask.. since how long you`ve been into such breathless poetry?

[Lenah Mehzabin]

well no need to praise that much ! It's really nothing in front of a lot of great poetries here :) and I'm still new here in writers cafe but writing is my hobby for so long :)

[Arsh]

Well, why you keeping yourself behind the wall of articulation? Everyone's got their own talent.. on here, yeah.. you're right, there's too many writers who write better than you.. better than me.. but don`t ya think, they too would have thought that.. you write better than `em.. I do write better than them.. ? So.. why so .. hard on yourself?

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Well oW? u really think positively :) It's an honour as a writer.Thanks for such appreciation :)

[Arsh]

Be my breathtaking guest get whirled by the whisper of my hotness as well as enjoy the time the God blows your way! Honor to me to have you in my heart ;)

[Lenah Mehzabin]

:p what a flirt .. but anyways can't help but get impressed by these beautiful lines. You are much more better in poems .

[Arsh]

I find you very fascinating. Sounds delightful by me. I'm sure.. we'd both have a great leaf of time ov`r the transparency of cafe`s site... so, let me hear now... am I preciously right?

[Lenah Mehzabin]

yes, sure my great friend .Glad to have u by my side :)

[Sadashivan Nair]

Dreamers know better about I am day dreamer too. I know your writing is so good inspiring...

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Than you so much ! : )

[Saddam]

I would be great story if you place it on paper. Beautiful poetry with a nice flow.

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thank u so much ! : ) but I actually didn't get what you meant by '' I would be great story if you place it on paper'' ?

[Saddam]

write story with this idea, it will really nice. You are welcome dear.

[sonnie ibadah]

i like the flow...nice write

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thank you : )

[armin]

nicely done lenah, I enjoyed it.
My hands are busy
Holding a gun,
Aiming to shoot
Straight at a dream

Inside it, lives two bird
Encoding a password
Of happily ever after
I liked those lines. Keep it up.
armin. ...

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thank you so much armin ! : ) I'm glad that u liked it !

[Confuser]

Well my dear, you rocked the world in this writing. I love, love, love it! Thank you.

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thank you so so much for your kind views ! :-)

[Confuser]

All true; never give false praise.

[Lenah Mehzabin]

You heartly welcome..I'm really happy and glad :D

[Confuser]

Y/W.....................................................Thanks....Bye.

[Jennifer Queen]

Very moving, I love how the rhythm of this writing pulls the reader along.

[Lenah Mehzabin]

thank u so much ! I m glad that u liked it :)

[Lupus Kaos]

"Love is Breath
And we live in it"

I liked these words among the rest of this poem. I think the way you wrote this, fast and clearly obscured is really beautifull.

[W R Stowe]

interesting concept yet a bit abstract but life is sometimes very much in a bubble waiting to burst and thank you again for your nice review

[bela]

writing is the best thing to express oneself. it removes one anxiety and stress.

nice poem.

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thank u so much Bela for ur nice words. :)