Shed your Guilt

Shed your Guilt

A Poem by Candle in the wind

 

When you feel guilty
That you have immersed me in melancholy
You only confirm that I have reasons to be sad
To feel forlorn
To regret the lost euphoria
 
If instead you were exasperated
That my misery was baseless
Chided me for feeling so
Dismissed my gloom
It would be more reassuring
That there was some substance
Some reciprocity
Even if not synonymy of response
It did make a difference
It wasn’t just an elusive dream
Like a wisp of smoke in the horizon
The mythical meeting point of the sea and the sky
Which fades away further if approached
 
You gave of yourself so effortlessly
You gave me such unbridled liberty
It was like walking in the rain
My parched soul was quenched
I breathed so easy
And felt rejuvenated
My being came alive
 
So this guilt diminishes the divinity
Of these ethereal passions and emotions
Shed it and be free.

© 2008 Candle in the wind


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So true the line
"guilt diminishes the divinity"

But at times its so so difficult to fight the guilt,it is just like quick sand. Engulfs you completely.

I like the metaphors,the poetic expressions, the eloquent lines.

The mythical meeting point of the sea and the sky
Which fades away further if approached

Great line.

Sorry couldn't understand the 3rd stanza initially, but now....it's fine.


Posted 12 Years Ago


6 of 6 people found this review constructive.




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very well written! i enjoyed reading it.
laceyjane

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

your writing is enlightening, really in this regards,
So this guilt diminishes the divinity
Of these ethereal passions and emotions
Shed it and be free
reading your words brought a sense of peace and understanding, in way of outlook, one can really
feel the impression of the soul being conveyed, and the core understanding of guilt, and how
to be able to shed the emotional tranparencies subject to the terms of condtion, and that being
how the heart is able to control, instead of being able to control the heart, the opening stanza
reminds me of gaining through an experience, i feel it as being wromnged by someone close,
and knowing how to deal with such circumstances in tranquil, meditative way of thinking. very nice work

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You gave of yourself so effortlessly
You gave me such unbridled liberty
It was like walking in the rain
My parched soul was quenched
I breathed so easy
And felt rejuvenated
My being came alive

So this guilt diminishes the divinity
Of these ethereal passions and emotions
Shed it and be free.

Very nicely done, Raj! Shedding guilt is divine. For the Christian it comes through repentance, something we must do often, even daily. I choose to walk in that freedom. I've lived both ways and have come to find out, I prefer freedom. It enables me to see more clearly, and to walk in the truth! As always, an amazing and tantalizing write!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ah! Again such a lovely piece..very well crafted!
"I breathed so easy
And felt rejuvenated
My being came alive"
I loved these lines the most :)

I also like the metaphors and the remorse feel of guilt which has been beautifully described throughout the write!
But, I think so it's the ending which took all the credit as it left a deep impression upon my mind even after reading the piece..
Very well written :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Oh wow, beautiful,,,,I love it,, I need not say more. =)

Love from me.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i needed to read this. i've been beating myself up about something and it is time to take the advice of your last stanza:
So this guilt diminishes the divinity
Of these ethereal passions and emotions
Shed it and be free.


Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This poem well with a big sigh at the end. Wonderful, beautiful imagery! You have some fantastic metaphors in here. And the ending wrapped it up so eloquently.
Cheers! XD
Conrad Wrobel

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I loved it right from the opening lines:

"When you feel guilty
That you have immersed me in melancholy
You only confirm that I have reasons to be sad"

A refreshing approach to the end of love.....nicely done.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is where I get serious, the mirage of sea meets sky looming further away on approach...great metaphor right there. the guilt trip from someone having themselves a pity party at your expense! I'm with you shed it now!!! And shed him too, he's not worth it.
Helen :(

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

It is so true...when you say that

"When you feel guilty
That you have immersed me in melancholy
You only confirm that I have reasons to be sad"

Oftentimes, I have a fight with my guy, and then I feel miserable, and he acts guilty, and I feel even worse...
You have put down in strong words every moment of that feel...

Your images are breath-taking...
I love your work.

Thank you so much, Ma'am, for sharing such talent with us...God Bless You!

Posted 12 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.


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