The Boiling Man

There was a time when I fell so hard on my knees and I was only 17 when I wrote this. Years later, it's still taunting me, even in my sleep.

 

Shh, Listen...   There's A Man...   Playing An Unusual Violin...

 

With The Strings That Are The Nerves...   And The Veins...   From His Own Arms...

 

How Wonderous The Sounds...   Of The Agonies Made...   By The Slicing And Dicing...

 

Down With The Lambs...   Up With The Larks...

 

Run To The Beds, Children...   Before It Gets Dark...

 

Around, Around The Sun We Go...   As The Moon Goes Around Us...

 

While The Parts Of Us Are Dying...   In The Slow And The Painful Ways...

 

We Do Not Die Of Death...   We Die Of The Vertigo...

 

Run, Dying Breeds, Run...   Like There's No Time...   And No Tomorrow...

 

Yet, We're All Still Gonna Die One Way...   Or Another...   No Matter What...

 

And I Just Saw The Dead...   Small And Great...  Stand Before The God...

 

I Witnessed The Blood Of The Christ...   Dripping On All Of Their Skins...

 

This Is Just Another Altar...   Inside The Church...   Of The Fears And The Pains...

 

Now, I Know Why Jesus Wept...

 

Author's Note

This writing was inspired by James O'Barr, the creator of "The Crow"... (Thanks, James)

Reviews

[Wolfwind Words]

This i found to be a unique read. It's different format cause my mind to spin around alot like the images that you presented.
I liked how it was heart felt. The feelings of dispare and helplessness, seemed to fling out like and open blender.
Good read!
Thanks for sharing!

[Christina-Marie]

I love your style of writing.. its great. Ive learned many new styles in such a short time. I try to learn and use them in my writing.

[Taja B.]

Overall, I liked reading this- it's a unique read. I think you've built the tones of desolation, gruesomeness and gloominess very nicely, and I liked the how the events of the poem seemed rushed but fits into this poem. But, I thought that the ellipses were a bit distracting and it threw me off a bit when it comes to the flow.

Despite of the ellipses, I still think that it's a creative and enjoybable poem.

Thanks for sharing.

[Mr Marathon]

Very raw. A few hackneyed lines in there, interesting style. I haven't seen it before.

It's a little distracting, I know some people who just simply hate ellipses, especially when unnecessary. I was a bit thrown off by it too. Although the style is quite playful with it which is enjoyable.

[Marni A. K.]

i love how you are able to jump around different scenes while maintaining a consistent story. This kee[s the reader drawn in. Good job.

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It's me again!
I just read your poem,
And wow is all I can say.
You have the mind and work of a great writer.
I am looking forward to more of your writings.

[J. Elsie]

The first five lines were brilliance.

"Painfully" should it be "Painful" ? not sure if i'm just missing something there or not.

"We die of The Vertigo" - another bit of brilliance.

I enjoyed this poem. Agree it is Unique.
I know nothing about the Crow or James O'Barr... but I loved the format of this poem so I am intrigued as to what part was inspired by this person.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Very unique and vivid and I loved the imagination part a lot.
Good visualization.

[Diamondjules]

Very well done my new friend. The last line really got me. I will read more of your works!! Bravo!

[Nidhi]

Hello Michael
As it is nice of u to drop by my blank page on cafe..after losing all writings didn't have heart to write here more although my writings were safe. will keep in touch with ur writings.. Do check out my blog space:

http://icysvolcanicworld.spaces.live.com/

cheers
Nidhi

[~D.A. Phoenix~]

Wow what can i say that everyone else hasn't? The layout is very unique and the subject is not an easy one to tackle and convey with such raw emotion. This is Great i love it