Dawn Breaks

In the haze

of early morning,

before wakefulness

you are there

 

In earliest hours

I speak

and feel you,

listening

 

Then glares

the harsh light of day

and it is too late

 

The dawn… breaks.

Reviews

[quinfinn]

can't tell you how many times i have awoken , clutching my pillow in my arms, only to find myself alone and greeted by the empty dawn. wow, this goes deep for me, Rita. well penned!

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Quin. When I read over this poem again, I see it as a feeling of loneliness. When I wrote it, I was thinking about my father, and how even after 10 years, I can still wake up with him on my mind, for just a second thinking he was still around. Then the harsh reality comes with dawn.

[quinfinn]

my mom and my dad both passed within the space of 14 months...not too long ago. they still visit me in my dreams almost every night. but this also brought memories of vanished romance and that horrible feeling of waking up with a loved one's embrace, only to discover it is your pillow which you are holding onto ...so tightly.

[jwesley]

Really had to grin at the end of this wonderful piece, my friend. Ain't it the truth!!!

[Rita L. Sev]

Thanks, Jimmy! So glad you enjoyed!

[Sami Khalil]

A dawn of love and light. What more do we need. Marvelous...:)

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Sami - the dawn here is more of a loss, but the light brings with it other joys. :)

[Sami Khalil]

K. You are welcome...:)

[Frieda P]

So much impact in so few lines...the dawn breaks and so does the heart. Awe inspiring read Rita...love this one, it speaks to me.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Frieda. I appreciate this immensely, from a poet of your caliber.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this reminds me of robert creeley, one of my favorite beat poets.

i realize you are no longer beside me...and my eye breaks with the dawn...

so much to this short piece...love it.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you so much! I have heard Creeley's name (I grew up with my brother reading many poets) but am not familiar with his work. I'll check him out!