Deceptive Hologram

Physics has no business

in matters of heart space

void of formulas, logic or reason

 

Matriculated students of the subliminal

seeking hidden clues

of mutiny or treason

 

In the currency of compassion

fiscal apathy is on the books

Deceptive holograms are painted,

nothingness with reality’s looks

 

Unattractive nature,

a mask of charm juxtaposed

Like a brown and barren lawn

embellished with cheap flamingos  

Author's Note

For the "bad poetry" contest... :)

Reviews

[Baby Ricochet]

Makes no sense at all. Good job

[Rita L. Sev]

Ha! Yes! My work here is done... Thanks, Mark!

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

For the "bad poetry" contest...really? lol

I think this was quite clever in the way that you sort of took on the idea of literature vs. the more tangible nature of mathematics. And then you sort of made your way to the juxtaposition of what we tend to "see" on the outide and how it is often just a barren lawn with cheap ornamentation. Clever...

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Sarah... those pink flamingos always puzzle me... LOL!

[Aethereal]

Insightful poem! Your last verse was the best. I have a monster prowling about my house with sharp teeth, claws, and a predatory nature who's embellished with soft white fluff, an occasional purr, and a sweet meow, but only mice are afraid of her.

[Rita L. Sev]

Ah - I have a similar beast, a brute in her own mind... lol! Thanks, Aethereal!

[Einstein Noodle]

great job. I especially enjoy the second verse ...oh ...and the third...and first and last...i see all kinds of bits of this and that in your "Bad" poem...its got science, conspiracy of matriculated students...corrupt power brokers, and last but not least liars and cheaters...:) ok...I am on my third cup of coffee and have been up since 2 am....(to much napping yesterday) i think your sublime conscience has been sparked by your muse...
E.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thanks so much, E! This was an interesting challenge - my muse was about to quit!

[ANTO]

This is bad (bad) poetry - and you know what two negs make ...lol
See the things is Rita - you don't have a bad bone in your body ergo.....

I enjoyed this, especially the reference to the ubiquitous garden decors - one such one, a cat sillhouette with glass eyes gets my little dog worked into such a frenzy - its all too real to him.
X

[Rita L. Sev]

Ha! Thanks so much, Anto! I'm sure I do have a bad bone or two, but I am glad that I have been able to keep that from the WC! Your poor dog - they really get freaked out over the funniest things!

[Frieda P]

Okay that last stanza could stand alone and be good poetry, so I think you need to cut it...ha, clever, and confusing, something like 'bad' poetry, but not so bad. ;-) I just thought anyone reading this on live feed will think I'm a b***h, it's for a bad poetry contest! I should stop drinking vino now..... Lol ;-)

[Rita L. Sev]

Ha! Well if someone is reading this on live feed, they should come on over to get the whole story... :) Thanks, Frieda!

[Frieda P]

True that, you're welcome Rita, enjoy your weekend! :-)

[Pryde Foltz]

Yeah, but it's kind of good. Sorry. A seeming nonsense write with meaning all the same. Loved the last stanza.

[Rita L. Sev]

Exactly what I was going for - nonsense with hidden sense... Thanks, Pryde!

[Dr. Wood ?]

Not BAD...Sorry.....BAD......yeah and good too

[Rita L. Sev]

Ha! Yes, not sure which I want it to be... Thanks, Doc!

[Angel]

I....uh...ummmm....

WUT?????????????

[Rita L. Sev]

Lol! It's for the contest with the list of odd words - It was quite the puzzle to put them together!

[Angel]

Yeah, I saw that list of words...You are a braver soul than I...

[icelandicblue]

This was great but that last stanza just hit a chord with me:

Unattractive nature,
a mask of charm juxtaposed
Like a brown and barren lawn
embellished with cheap flamingos

I can see it and I just can't look away. Great job Rita.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thanks, Blue! I saw those flamingos on the dead lawn as soon as I read the list...