Downpour

Tick, tick, tick, tick . . . 

tickticktickticktick...

Time is a downpour

of memories

racing

down 

the drain

Author's Note

Listening to the rain on the sidewalk...

Reviews

[Author Unknown]

Losing or remembering . I think losing brain cells . LOL . Your trying out some new ideas and writing styles here . Or perhaps mixing it up . Anyway all styles came out very good .

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, AU.

[Pryde Foltz]

Great sensory piece, Rita.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Pryde!

[Baby Ricochet]

I'm getting that as a tattoo. (No I'm not) But I did like it.

[Rita L. Sev]

LOL! Thanks, Mark!

[Sue Hart]

That is beautifully done. The clock speeding up as time slips by. Memories slipping down a drain. Oh the sad truth of how our memories slowly close off. Short, sweet, and sadly true.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Sue. I try to hold on to as many drops as I can...

[Marie]

I like the way the "ticks" are spaced at first, then quick and close together..just like time...

[Rita L. Sev]

That was how the rain was sounding here yesterday - slow, a drizzle - then a fast deluge... like time that stands still one moment and speeds up the next...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

what a perfect metaphor---the drops of life...splash against our sidewalk and are gone....and those memories go down the drain...but somehow...there is still standing water in our mind.

[Rita L. Sev]

Ooh! I like the standing water image - some of those memories become stagnant breeding grounds for vermin... Thank you, Jacob - you kept me seeing...

[Sheila Kline]

They do slip and slosh down the drain - just hope it doesn't get clogged at some point and we keep reliving the same events over and over and over. That's when to call in the plumber to clear our minds of those dang thoughts of yesterday that don't want to flow downstream!
Tick, tick, tick, tick, must not become that drip we don't want to hear.....lol

[Rita L. Sev]

Lol! Good point, Sheila! Thanks for reading!

[Ahena MK]

Really good ...
Ahena :) ..

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Ahena!

[Gleb Zavlanov]

Very succinctly and fabulously explained. I just hate how fast time flies by, and I think you summarized it neatly in this nice poem. Great job!

[Rita L. Sev]

The tempo of yesterday's rain really brought it home for me... time goes so fast! Thanks so much, Gleb!

[Frieda P]

Ahhh that incessant ticking of time fleeting, I hope those memories don't all go down the drain. Well said Rita...tickticktick.

[Rita L. Sev]

The rain kept slowing down, then speeding up, all day - like certain moments in time... Just pushed my pensive mood into this particular corner. Thanks, Frieda!