Chiaroscuro

Knock knock.

 

          Who’s there?

 

It’s Death.

 

I’ve come

for your very last breath…

Author's Note

Get it? ;)

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

there are so many marvelous examples in art ... leave it to Rita to paint it in a poem ... i see myself answering "Who’s there? " while looking through the peep hole and making sure the chain is bolted .. do you think that will stop him?? ;)
E.

[icelandicblue]

The shades of light and the dark play in the shadows. Who shall answer that knock...not I.
Chiaroscuro was the name of the rat in Despereaux who didn't want to live in the dark of the dungeon but would never really be accepted in the light. I like your shaded meaning.

[Marie]

I've read all the reviews, and I can't improve on this. Your point is well made in a very few words.

[Sami Khalil]

Witty but with seriousness of death, creative and relevant. A good concept and poem...:)...........

[Cory Barrett]

I'm keeping the door closed

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Okay that is it, I am never answering the door again. a very witty poem in such simple words.

[Rita L. Sev]

Lol! Thanks, Dale.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are welcome :)

[C. Rose]

Took a minute. Chiaroscuro, contrast of light and dark, knock knock jokes are light, death is dark.

Not fully getting the italics vs. bold. Is that showing light vs dark as italics vs bold?
Italics vs. bold made me think one person said the italics and the other the bold - but that's not true - because death said knock knock right?

I love the word Chiaroscuro, the concept is witty, I think it could be improved with some futzing of the formatting or maybe even another line or two like "... death who?" - but death doesn't play along and continues with your last line. Or not. Your poem your decision.

[Rita L. Sev]

The whole idea for this came from the fact that I love the word Chiaroscuro too, and was playing with the concept of light and dark humor. The fonts are meant to be "light" and "dark" (thin and flowing vs. dark and bold), but I didn't want to give away the "Dark" by putting Death's "Knock Knock" in bold. I did have a few lines continuing the "joke", but it felt cumbersome, so I just went with these few lines. Experimental silliness! :)

[Pryde Foltz]

I have to agree … I think the last line should be 'death wh…."

[C. Rose]

That would be funny. Still I think she's put more thought into this than I have. Chiaroscuro is just really fun to say.

[Pryde Foltz]

I know she put more than me …great word.

[C. Rose]

It might not give away too much to have "Knock Knock" be bold.

[C. Rose]

Is "who's there" both bold and italic now?

[C. Rose]

And I changed my mind. 4 lines is good. While you could add more of the classic back and forth knock knock, I like the quick and to the point 4 lines.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, get it...
the lightness of the knock knock joke, the darkness of who it actually is and that it is sooner or later going to happen.

better look through the peephole before opening that door.

[Rita L. Sev]

Good advice... hope he doesn't sneak in through the back... Thanks, Jacob.