Song of Man

A Sonnet for Sami. :)

Harken! Look ye unto the heavens above:
Angels with raised voices: she reverberates sound
Of graceful beauty, hope and lightness abound,
Communion, all joyous souls filled thereof,
Have lifted them wrapped in wings soft as the dove
Of interior thoughts. We cling to the ground;
Oh! rise us up, circle us again around
And teach us grace, loyalty, humbleness, love.
Thine spirit like the Sun, immersed in thy heat;
Whom hadst a melody and voice that doth shine:
True as the childish heart, innocent, supine,
To tarry your way along life's chosen path,
In ambiguous intent; though yet hearts beat
The seeds of unrest in thine breast men do hath.

Author's Note

Classic Italian style, iambic pentameter.
This is an 11 meter per line piece. Both 10 and 11 meter are accepted in this format. Proper emphasis on the five syllables per line.
Standard 14 line.
a b b a a b b a
c d d e c e

Reviews

[clisa]

I am so impressed with anyone who can write a sonnet. I have tried to tackle it and I get bogged down in the rhyme and the meter. One thing you may want to try - write a sonnet in modern language - leave out the ye,Thine,whom,harken,tarry,hath and all other language of antiquity. I think it would be wonderful for a modern audience to come to love sonnets but this antiquated language might get in the way.

[Rogue]

I agree. My voice gets lost under all the antiquated and flamboyant prose. This is why I don't normally do this type of piece. Though I am quite capable of it. However, I wanted to do this in a style as authentic as possible.
Thank you for your thoughts on it and review. :)

[Troy Henson]

Wow I am impressed with anyone that bring such old sculpture into a piece of writing.
Very well done. U dont see this very often anymore.
Regards
Troy

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Once again, Rogue you've impressed me beyond measure. My respect for your ability only deepens as I continue to read your work. And I love the title!

[Rogue]

Thank you, that is very kind of you to say. As you can see as you read I wander all over the place. :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Well, it's a pleasure wandering with you.

[Jturner1973]

Love it, love the language.... it doesn't get in the way on this one. If nothing else it drive's it home. I really enjoyed... and I will enjoy reading it several more times.

[Rogue]

Thank you. That is very kind of you to say. I appreciate you reading. :)

[Helen Warner]

Wow, it is refreshing to see someone tackle classic form and do it well. In today's world of poetry the collegiate crowd will rave about some new poet who strings together nonsense laced with profanity and call it brilliant and brush a beautifully executed piece aside. Thank you for sharing this.

[Rogue]

What a wonderful review. I thank you very much for your kind words here. :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Wow! Nice piece.:)

I really admire writers who know much about sonnets. I have tried one but I am really not quite sure and I'm afraid I didn't meet the required iambic pentameter. Could you read mine entitled "I Cannot Say Goodbye" and help give me your assessment on it?

[Redboy]

This is beautiful rogue! keeps reminding me of white...liquid light. and weed...(im weird)

[Rogue]

You bottling sunshine and growing crab grass?
-eyebrow wiggle-

Thank you, very kind of you to read and to say. :)

[Redboy]

lmao

[Rogue]

:P

[kelvin]

Lost for words here very beautifully written. It flows gracefully with gentle vibes. You have laid a virtually beautiful combination of words a strong piece of art here. Thank you for sharing this and as always keep writing fellow writer.

[Rogue]

Thank you, that is very lovely of you to say. :)

[kelvin]

You're very welcome.

[kelvin]

A very golden gift for a friend to receive you are a very warm soul indeed don't change, this is where true inner beauty starts to shine from within to the outer skin. Shine bright

[Rogue]

You, Sir, are a gentleman and that is a rare find indeed these days. What a nice thing for you to say and I thank you. :)

[kelvin]

Well I thank my mother for that and you are very welcome.

[kelvin]

And thank you very much

[Chris]

I always wonder why present writers revert to olde Englsh when they write sonnets.

[Rogue]

In this case it was done for two reasons, one to be true to the style of the piece and two for the man it was written for (as noted in the header). It is appropriate to his character.
Thank you for both reading and reviewing. :)

[Chris]

was a thoughtful comment, not really a review. Regardless of the reason - it took personal effort and you achieved the goal.

[Rogue]

Thank you.

[Silhouette]

I tried writing a sonnet once...talk about an epic fail lol so I'm impressed with anyone blessed with the gift. Incredibly beautiful, radiantly written, and these lines are my favorite:

Communion, all joyous souls filled thereof,
Have lifted them wrapped in wings soft as the dove
Of interior thoughts. We cling to the ground;
Oh! rise us up, circle us again around

[Rogue]

I thank you very much for your kind words and the lovely review. :)

[Silhouette]

Anytime =)

[Tate Morgan]

Oh I am trying my best to figure out this formula It sounds beautiful

[Rogue]

Thank you, Tate.
The first eight lines in the Italian format are set and must be as presented.
The last six can be as I have done them or any combination of the following as long as you do not end with a couplet in the fifth and then final line (no dd or cc, etc)
c d c d c d
c d d c d c
c d e c d e
c d e c e d
c d c e d c

[Tate Morgan]

thank you