Tear Tangled Lashes

Blurry gaze through
tear tangled lashes
soul filled dew
longest drawn out night...

heart pumping tears
down brackish streams
pouring through the
corners of her sight

pool of sorrow slips
her cupeled  palms
gentle drops freckle
this silk gown tonight

finger tips brushing
tears pass temples
salty saturated skin
gleams in candle light

opening dark shutters
pass billowing sheers
she now sees todays
dawning light so bright

stepping on to her balcony
fresh cool wind dries
her tired and lovely
mourning eyes...

Reviews

[Dane Osborne]

Excellent. I was swayed and sucked in by the flow of your words. It took a describtion of an everyday experience and made something unworldly and hazily whimisical out of it. The ability to do such is clear sign of a true writer. Keep in there and keep learning and you'll do great things with your stuff. P.S Don't ever say you won't get published, i've been published and I can tell you that you have all the potential to be to. Kudos

[LA Lorena]

I have missed you and your lovely words Rossen. It's nice to see you back, and to enjoy one of my favourite writers yet again.

[WonderWhy]

This is perfect. Heartbreaking and perfect.

[Maureen Mwaniki]

A sort of fragile beauty...so tender and vulnerable..i love it

[J.L Hunter]

Each line dilated and airy, wide open, leaving much for the imagination. There is one thing I really like about these poems you write, when you associate a picture in the middle of the writing. It is kind of like a visual aid. Although I usually disagree with too much art disrupting the creative absorption of words by the reader, I would probably say that this is an exception. Actually, I think this only works for poetry and non-fiction instruction manuals and not with regular fiction (what I normally write). Thank you for sharing this bit of your mind.
It was a pleasant stay,
but I must say
That scratching and moaning beyond the closet door
Was rather disturbing
while I tried to sip my tea.

[Emily Filkins]

This was very good, i like the detail, very emotional but sortof regretful, were you going for that?
good job

[northern monkey]

Apleasure to read this sumptuous piece. Your language is luxuriant.

[Deviant Works]

Absolutely breathtaking... I could close my eyes and drift with these words. See her sorrowful tears as she brushes them away, basked in candlelight, opening shutters to the world beyond, pained and broken as she steps out onto the balcony. A beautiful, lovely image and yet lined with a profound sadness, unaware of why her tears fall, just sharing her agony as she mourns. I love how you began this with smooth words and then added the image of a woman wearing the slightest hint of loss at the corners of her lips, yet almost peaceful. Truly amazing and incredibly written, Rossen.

[FireWoman]

An open vein flowing gracefully.

[Emily B]

my oldest daughter is heartbroken, someone she looked up to passed of cancer last night, I hope I find the right words for her tonight

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

such a beautifully delicate write~ its beauty is captured within the fragility~