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Compartment 114
Compartment 114
The Demise

The Demise

A Poem by RyanXIII
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A haiku i wrote.

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Lights of Glory Shine

Descent to Infernal Pits

Great Demise Begins

© 2013 RyanXIII


Author's Note

RyanXIII
I was in a funny mood this morning...

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short but i like it! you should post this kind of stuff more often

Posted 10 Years Ago


Reminds of dante's inferno
gets me a great picture of release

Posted 10 Years Ago


This offers a visually strong contrast between light and darkness, good and evil, etc. Perfect writing, but may I suggest a stronger, bolder font that drives home the words. The font feels weak next to these words.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RyanXIII

11 Years Ago

Thank you very much for your comments
A short poem with such strong words

Lights Glory Shine Descent Internal Great Demise Begins - and among them some are beautiful sound ones - descend, great, demise, glory

A good mood and a good poem.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RyanXIII

11 Years Ago

thank you for your comments im glad it struck a chord
I like this piece. Very hard to write haikus (for me at least) but you wrote an exellent one. Nice job, i enjoyed reading

Posted 11 Years Ago


RyanXIII

11 Years Ago

thank you very much i hope you enjoyed my contest entry also
Personally, I've never attempted Haiku but I do like this.

It's deep and makes the reader think. That's important, I think.

Altogether, keep it up. :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Nice

Posted 11 Years Ago


Hey! So I admire your stab at a haiku poem, because it's (obviously) hard to pack much into such a short statement. This was pretty good, as it is, and better than most haikus I've seen.

Anyway, keep writing, and best wishes.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Nice job. Even though I'm not the best person to review poetry, I really like this. :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Pretty good really, maybe don't use so many caps. Haiku is an informal form of poetry. But still a good job.

Posted 11 Years Ago



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Added on May 6, 2013
Last Updated on May 14, 2013
Tags: haiku, death, hell, heaven

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RyanXIII
RyanXIII

Northumberland, United Kingdom



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My name is Ryan I am from the north-east of England and I am A music Degree student. I love to write although I have no idea if im any good at it or not (I guess thats why im here). more..

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