HIDDEN LOVE

HIDDEN LOVE

A Poem by Saddam

The rhyming of the chimes

Through the temple tho the heart

It is acting as unification

My whole world, my whole thought

 

Your hand for éclat but eyes on me

Lips praying but brow dance

You are in mixed emotion over my dare

But different story with your hair surged

 

Scolding me with pleasant heart

But concern with surround

I'm behind your a flare tippet

You are escaping but had not mind

 

That's the beauty of hidden love

No sin, no secret nor is punished

© 2014 Saddam


Author's Note

Saddam
This is very common in INDIA to play your girl when she come for pray. This is only place that girl's parent have no issue with this, and boy also. But difficult face when both families came around then their love make a hidden sines...

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Very nicely described. Well done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

9 Years Ago

thank you very much sir.....
Penny

9 Years Ago

Your welcome.
"That's the beauty of hidden love
No sin, no secret nor is punished"


Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

9 Years Ago

thank you very much sir.....
Sami Khalil

9 Years Ago

You are welcome...:)..................
I can relate to this scene in the country, pragmatic poem.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much dear friend.
Your writing just keeps on getting better and better dear friend. Thanks for the cultural note which adds context to the piece. I really like "That's the beauty of hidden love, no sin, no secret nor is it punished". Penny

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much dear friend. All improvement is from here....
beautiful use of the many metaphors + }

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much dear...
I enjoyed this because it gave me a peek into your culture. This is written really beautifully... trying to get a glance, any glance at the beautiful woman you have your eye set on. Wonderful!

~Stefanie

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

9 Years Ago

thanks a lot dear. that is too for me....
This is a nice peice if work it goes well together. It reaches far and it's different good job

Posted 9 Years Ago


Very beautiful my favorite piece out of your work its a bittersweet beauty .

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

9 Years Ago

Always nice to hear you dear.... Glad you like it...
Kamari's

9 Years Ago

:) anytime
Bittersweet and beautiful. Your poem is lovely my friend.

:) Julie

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautiful but has a sadness to it as well I feel.

Much emotion in this write.

Thank you for sharing this wonderful piece.

Blessings. kindred poet

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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RASRA, BALLIA, Uttar Pradesh, India



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