Death

Death

A Poem by xSamilynnx

There are many parts to death

The soul, the body, the emotions

 

When the body dies

The blood dries

The skin hardens

The bone darkens

 

When the soul dies

You can hear its cries

Singing its mournful songs loud

In this forever dead and alone crowd

 

When the emotion dies

Its because of people and lies

Your heart is still beating

You cut, hopeing you'll finally stop bleeding

© 2013 xSamilynnx


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Well done. The structure and rhyme scheme is solid. I love the conclusion you reach, and the progression you use to get there is great. I don't think I would have ordered them this way, and so I thank you for presenting them as you have. The only thing I would say is, the verse order doesn't match the order in the introduction, which for my obsessive brain causes some tension. Overall, a great write!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I like how you differentiate between the different types of death. You are right , metaphorically speaking...Bravo

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Great imagery in this Sami, i miss reading your poems. :) Anywho good work on this

Posted 6 Years Ago


Well done. The structure and rhyme scheme is solid. I love the conclusion you reach, and the progression you use to get there is great. I don't think I would have ordered them this way, and so I thank you for presenting them as you have. The only thing I would say is, the verse order doesn't match the order in the introduction, which for my obsessive brain causes some tension. Overall, a great write!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i hear that, and second the motion lol.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Excellent twist! I love reading your work ^^ thanks for writing!

Posted 6 Years Ago


A most deviant mode to write about, well done, good read.

Posted 6 Years Ago


This is a really interesting piece filled with so much emotion. Well done :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

xSamilynnx

6 Years Ago

Thank you!
The Elusive Mr Dunne

6 Years Ago

You're welcome :)
Your words are true. Many parts must die and many ways to go. Some more or less painful. I like how you described death. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 6 Years Ago


xSamilynnx

6 Years Ago

Thank you!
interesting piece, dark. It echos sadness but in a way that makes the reader understand the author is used to pain and sorrow. I like it:)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

xSamilynnx

6 Years Ago

thank you!
great descriptions. such deep, depressing words. very true words, but sad nonetheless. well written.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

xSamilynnx

6 Years Ago

Thank you

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xSamilynnx

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