Universe

Universe

A Poem by Saree Marcel

If not you, who will remember my dreams-? 
When I lay in lifeless December streams,  
Eyes closed in slumber, tell me what does life mean? 
There has to be more than the universe deems!  

Come lay with me on the frost-kissed ground- 
A night world broken; sadly crying in sound,
 Can you hear them whisper in the air all around? 
Like faded faces who longed to be found-  

Someday we'll burn off like the stars- 
Those we long to be close are getting too far- 
Will we keep viewing life as a bursting quasar-? 
Feeding on energy until it tears us apart? 

 Will the Universe keep going; keep moving on-? 
When death comes for me- will I truly be gone?

© 2019 Saree Marcel


Author's Note

Saree Marcel
Life after death- hm.

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The million dollar question. What happens when we die? This is beautifully penned, a lovely composition. Well penned Saree.

Chris

Posted 4 Days Ago


Saree Marcel

4 Days Ago

Thank you so much!
Wow, Saree, you've really painted a picture here! I think the last two lines might be my favorite, "Will the Universe keep going; keep moving on-?
When death comes for me- will I truly be gone?"
SOOOO GOOOD!! I like the rhyming too! I could tell you were really deep in thought when you wrote this piece! Fantabulous job!! 100/100

Posted 4 Days Ago


Saree Marcel

4 Days Ago

Thank you so much Nix, i see you around my profile a lot which makes me happy. Always a pleasure whe.. read more
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4 Days Ago

Well? What can I say :)? I admire your work. I like the way you write. :) It's so deep and personal.
This is beautiful and has such great rhyme and flow. Really beautiful to read and soak in.

Posted 1 Week Ago


Saree Marcel

1 Week Ago

Thank you :)))
I enjoyed the rhyme scheme, the flow is spot on, quite an emotional read though

Posted 1 Week Ago


Saree Marcel

1 Week Ago

Thank you Kim
I get board of reading s**t got anything that doesn't belong in the trash?

Posted 1 Week Ago


The dark Hydra

4 Days Ago

Haven't decide yet if y'all a******s or if I'm just not getting some magical point cus I see a lot o.. read more
Saree Marcel

4 Days Ago

You dont have to apologize hydra lol. And okay
Saree Marcel

4 Days Ago

We had a good slam fight, so I wouldn't call me a b***h. We're both slam poets, let's focus on that
Wonderful, I particularly the star as symbolism for the growing distance between ourselves and our loved ones.

Posted 1 Week Ago


Saree Marcel

1 Week Ago

Thank you very much for your review
Sarah, You pose the eternal questions so eloquently. The rhythm, rhyme, and thematic memory of your poem is expertly employed. I really like your works.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Saree Marcel

8 Months Ago

Thanks Allen. Was inspired by Poe and Robert Frost :)
What a question Sarah. Its the one we've been asking since we learned to speak. I'm glad you've left the question open because we all have different answers. I know my answer but I'm not telling! You've given us a great poem here and made us reflect on our mortality.
Take care.
Alan

Posted 9 Months Ago


Saree Marcel

9 Months Ago

I could never end off with something not a question. No one knows what the world has in store for us.. read more
WOW! Very powerful write, you have a wonderful talent for writing

Posted 9 Months Ago


Saree Marcel

9 Months Ago

Thank you! All in the name for Edgar Allan Poe!
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You are so natural poet Sarah! I'll save this for our blog Posts.

Posted 10 Months Ago


Saree Marcel

10 Months Ago

Thank you very much MC
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10 Months Ago

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Saree Marcel

Spit truth, bleed emotion, fight for love



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I'm the youth of WritersCafe, I'm 18. I discuss topics in rough manners. I do slam poetry mainly but I do like the calm lulling waves of destruction. A lot of you hate me for some reason? Is it t.. more..

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