Butterflies

Butterflies

A Poem by Sarah Renee

Butterflies,
They come and go;
No one sees them,
So no one knows.

When you're near, they start to flutter
And when they fly, my heart does sputter.

I love them enough to let them fly
But the day they leave, is the day I'll cry
And if I'd cried until today
Would they love me enough to stay?

I cannot say they will not leave, 
but if they do my heart will grieve
and if I grieve, will You stay? 
To wash this terrible grief away.

You did not stay, and so I cried
Today's the day,
I watched them die.

My butterflies?
They came and went.
Because of You,
My love is spent.

I thought our love was never ending,
but then you set them free. 
From now on, We'll be gone forever.
My butterflies
and Me.

© 2012 Sarah Renee


Advertise Here
Want to advertise here? Get started for as little as $5

Author's Note

Sarah Renee
Its kind of rough but I wrote it for a contest and never had the confidence to submit it. Let me know what you think, I'd love feedback.

My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Featured Review

I don't see any reason why this piece of work you hid under the bush when this could be at least in the front row in a contest...this is a neat one...I liked the simpleness like a jolly tone singing a sad song...you don't cry your heart out in your work not at least in this poem and there is no somberness which is good for a reader who is happened to be just checking out new works by new ones...



Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




Reviews

It's aesthetically brilliant. I had issues with some of your capitalization, but that's a marginal error. You are no beginner.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i love the part...
"You did not stay, and so I cried
Today's the day,
I watched them die."
it was good,
yeah!


Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It's simple, but very emotional. I like it. I especially give you props for choosing a rhyme scheme- I know that gets quite difficult. Great piece. (:

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I don't see why you didn't had the confidence to submit it...It's very beautiful and I'm sure that it remembers everybody about the feeling they felt when they first fell in love...Well...at least it reminds me :)
Beautiful poem!
Keep up the great work!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I don't see any reason why this piece of work you hid under the bush when this could be at least in the front row in a contest...this is a neat one...I liked the simpleness like a jolly tone singing a sad song...you don't cry your heart out in your work not at least in this poem and there is no somberness which is good for a reader who is happened to be just checking out new works by new ones...



Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautiful poem and imagery! There's a touch of sadness in the ending but it ties the story together well! keep writing!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I don't know if this is the first poem you've ever written, but it is nice.
It is a little rough yes and it could use a little more flow, but I think that will come with simply writing more poems so keep up the good work. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is wonderful, love the imagery

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

beautifully written...love your imagery...butterflies... Kudo's

Lovely the way you capture so much emotion in this piece of perfect poetry!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Thats so sweet :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

508 Views
11 Reviews
Rating
Added on June 21, 2012
Last Updated on June 21, 2012


Related Writing

People who liked this story also liked..


Innocence Innocence

A Poem by Kat


HIT YOUR GOAL HIT YOUR GOAL

A Poem by afra