When your love was not for mine

love when seems fasle from other side,this world turns into hell.

Those winds turned all wild,
when your love was not for mine,
and darkness prevailed,
where even shadows denied to acompany,
and all i could see was my tears,
because there was no one,
to wipe,
to console...

Walking down those miles,
to reach the lane where we met,
i never got tired to wait,
for summer till winter,
from bloomy trees to sheded leaves,
all displayed a hopefull stay,
which finally got all apart,
when your love was not for mine....

My love was not an epic,
to be given a place in sheets,
but rather it was,
gift of several preconceptions,
certain manupulations,
which had no ends,
which had no life,
and once did my nerve erupt,
when you love was not for mine...

Author's Note

Wrote this one after a gap of one month.do give your views.

Reviews

[Leigh]

I like the opening line the best as it tells me how you were feeling straight away. I got a great atmosphere and feeling from this poem, you have described a time, 'When' a place 'Those miles' and in the possesive a person 'Mine' and thats what brings this one home in a very powerful and direct way. I can feel your personal sadness, expressed as part of an every day occurence by millions of people, unfortunately..

[Suditi]

The last stanza! My oh my!
Wow.
Glad to read your work after so long!
Hope to read tons more real soon :D
Anyway, a very touching poem. It is heart crushing, really.
Way to go Selva :D

[Monica]

I love it! The sencond stanza is quite beautiful...

"Walking down those miles,
to reach the lane where we met,
i never got tired to wait,
for summer till winter,
from bloomy trees to sheded leaves,
all displayed a hopefull stay,
which finally got all apart,
when your love was not for mine...."

...Your word choice was perfect. I had to read it more than once. The last line captures such sadness, deep emotions...
Your poem is heartfelt and written beautifully. Good job! Thank you for sharing :)

[Shay]

its very deep, emotions fly in it and i like it alot great job with it

[$êlvån]

Thanks everyone for your lovely comments which motivates me to write n think i way i do....some critique reviews have made me more conscious too..so u guys are really helpful in making me a better writer...thanks all

[Manpreet]

This is straight from the heart and directly on the paper the feel did not get distorted even for a single word. Perfect work and a great write.!

[Manpreet]

A beautiful poem that I have been trying to write for some time but could not and you have written it so beautifully Please see if the lines need some corrections: and once did my nerve erupt,
when you love was not for mine... ( is it you or your ?)

[Sleeping Maiden]

wow... this is seriously so sad... the pain of love is expressed well!! Lovely. Unrequited love is no fun..but seems to be common nowadays... hmm this poem of yours is wonderful but shows a great deal of pain! It saddens me.. Stunning work though! Great joB!

[Renée]

unrequited love.. I join other voices in comments.. I love the line " My love was not a epic, to be given a place in sheets..

[Dayran]

Our experiences with the guide of the epics are sometimes so strong, they make our individual self appear so small in comparison to the grandiose schemes and achievements of the universe. We lose sight of the simple things.

[luna11]

I love this poem :)
It's very poetic and full of emotions.
I love the last stanza, and the repeated use of "your love was not for mine"
Very well written
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