Mutual Surrender

hmmmm

I lust after the geometry of your being,

poised on top of me to explore,

like a birthday present waiting to be

u n w r a p p e d...

I pull you closer to me,

closer than the spaces of our kisses,

defying distance dividing the contours of our flesh

until we become

consumed with the fire void of chaste intentions,

slaves to the urgency of the moment

...and y-yesss

let's pour out our words of love into this feverish motion,

unrestricted by rhythm,

unbounded by time--

until we lose ourselves

and find ourselves

in each other

collapsed. . . . . . .in mutual surrender

Author's Note

Okay, it's been quite a long time since I last wrote a poem. Unlike before when I could write nonstop, this one took ages. Any comments would be welcome. :)

Reviews

[DrD]

It may have taken ages, but it will also be remembered for ages. I love your passion and eloquence of expression. There are times when words convey more than meaning and this is one. I was enraptured by the urgency of this writing and enjoyed it tremendously. Extremely well done.

[Rocans]

!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Yes. This was amazing! So many lines I like in this :
"I pull you closer to me,
closer than the spaces of our kisses,
defying distance dividing the contours of our flesh"...

You charge me to aspire to write poetry quite like this! Excellently penned Miss Arzel, it gave me great joy :)

[Talkless]

this is absolutely wonderful i can't deny..........bravoo!!!

[Shirlena]

Aww you know you gonna get comments girly...what are you pretending :) This was on point and you're the one who's getting tributes written to them so you know this delicious,flavor-licious and nutritious :).

[m.s.early]

Salacious and tastefully so. The sweet utterances of surrender produce fruit on the lips of lovers. You've graced the emotions well if elegant verse. Well done, friend.

[Blue]

I learned a new word today: salacious. :) Thanks for reviewing my work, Silver!

[Kaitlyn Raiford]

It is lovely, and I can feel the passion amongst the words as I can in an act of passion itself.

[Blue]

Wow. That's a beautiful compliment, Kaitlyn... Thank you so much!

[Kaitlyn Raiford]

You are entirely welcome.

[Melobldnfr]

You had me from the first line: "...geometry of your being". ABSOLUTELY LOVE THAT!

[Blue]

Thanks a lot, Mel! I'm not into math elements but it's good to experiment sometimes. ;)

[max_vonnegut]

Woah -- this is VERY intense. It's a good piece

[Blue]

Glad you think so, Max. Thanks a lot!

[stars are far]

"until we lose ourselves
and find ourselves
in each other"

that was done well..those lines sounded the best for me..well done dear

[Blue]

Thank you so much, Suhad!

[Rita L. Sev]

Sensual, not sleazy - nicely crafted, Blue!

[Blue]

Thank you, Rita!