Mutual Surrender

hmmmm

I lust after the geometry of your being,

poised on top of me to explore,

like a birthday present waiting to be

u n w r a p p e d...

I pull you closer to me,

closer than the spaces of our kisses,

defying distance dividing the contours of our flesh

until we become

consumed with the fire void of chaste intentions,

slaves to the urgency of the moment

...and y-yesss

let's pour out our words of love into this feverish motion,

unrestricted by rhythm,

unbounded by time--

until we lose ourselves

and find ourselves

in each other

collapsed. . . . . . .in mutual surrender

Author's Note

Okay, it's been quite a long time since I last wrote a poem. Unlike before when I could write nonstop, this one took ages. Any comments would be welcome. :)

Reviews

[DrD]

It may have taken ages, but it will also be remembered for ages. I love your passion and eloquence of expression. There are times when words convey more than meaning and this is one. I was enraptured by the urgency of this writing and enjoyed it tremendously. Extremely well done.

[topsyturvy]

This was... Exquisite. I loved the flow and the sensuality of this piece. Continue writing, don't stop, don't you dare stop!

[Blue]

*Chuckling* Okay, Ma'am. :)

[Blue]

Thank you so much!

[Einstein Noodle]

"unrestricted by rhythm,
unbounded by time--"

these lines melded the experience of making love with poetry itself for me ... (i keep wanting to say rhyme instead of time)
also really like "..the geometry of your being," ... its so much more than simply the body ... nice job Arzel (Blue) ... its a sizzler!
E.

[Blue]

Yeah, I was tempted to change "time" with "rhyme" but--I think it's best if I leave it as it is. Thank you so much, Einstein! I love your new avatar. I love dogs.

[Einstein Noodle]

me too! her name is Bella :)

[Blue]

Named after Isabella Swan of Twilight series?

[Einstein Noodle]

:) no ... Bella Mia (Italian) tho I say she is Irish, Norma insists otherwise and I never win when it comes to my Norma :))

[Blue]

Haha. :) So sweet of you to submit. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem. The good description took the reader into good places and thoughts. Good to surrender to love. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Blue]

Thank you, Coyote!

[Tom]

The emotion and imagery throughout this creative, sensuous poem are intense and dramatically delightful!

Penned with passion to sublime effect! Splendid !!

[Blue]

Thank you, Tom!

[Cassie]

I relate to your authors note, this is good. your still good at this. I enjoyed

[Blue]

Thank you, Cassie! I'm still having exams next week so I'll think of our poem after this chaos. ;)

[Lyn Anderson]

A good job - sensual, without being overt. Romantic. Nicely done.

[Blue]

Thank you, K.L.! I'm actually shying away from the 'overt' zone.

[Jack...]

My friend, this was exquisitely beautiful and oh so alluring. I fell in love while reading this today. Superb, spellbinding and sensual. Very nicely penned my friend.

[Blue]

Thank you so much for having fallen in love with this. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

well i see both a sexual encounter and a writing encounter with the muse in this..

he is poised on top of her to do either...enter her physically or enter her mentally...the words will come either way...

the surrender, the heat of the moment is so well captured...when we just give in to the feeling and forget any chaste intentions...

like a pair of catholic teens, saying "oh what the hell" hiding the rosary in plain sight.

great journey this took me on...and after reading it..i am still feeling it.

[Blue]

I love your perspective, Jacob! I didn't see it that way but it makes sense. You think out of the box! Thank you.

[Morgan Storms]

Nice. I like your descriptions and it was sensual and romantic.

[Blue]

Thank you so much, Morgan!

[Robert Strzalko]

A very sensual and artistic piece of writing. I like it.

[Blue]

Thank you, Robert!