Aphasia

Why can't anyone understand me?

I tried to scream for help

Nothing came out

She looked at me 

Her eyes said it all

They thought I was gone

That no one was home

No one understood

Doctor says,

"His mind is in another place"

Yet I beg to differ

Tears roll from her eyes

"I'll never leave you"

She says

If that were only true

I am no more than a husk

And she could see so too 

Author's Note

Thought I would try something different

Reviews

[viola]

Very nice. It can be read from so many different perspectives. I like that. People with vastly different experiences can relate to it.
Three very small suggestions.
First, I would make the second line simply "Nothing came out."
Second, I would make "And no one was home" "That no one was home"
Third, work on "I am nothing more than a husk now." It just doesn't flow quite right to me. I think it might be too long. You could try getting rid of the now? I'm not sure.
As always, it is your poem. Do what you will with the suggestions!

[Insight "MH"]

There is a saying that goes: "You will not know the real value of something only after losing it" That story is sad, but the write is beautiful. Good job!

Insight.

[Shadowkai]

Thank you Insight

[Insight "MH"]

You are welcome.

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

This is excellent really tugged at my feelings, i've read the poem over from a variety of perspectives now and simply love how many stories can be unravelled, very well written thank you

- ATC

[Shadowkai]

Thank you I am quite happy that even if I change styles, you guys and gals still enjoy it and for that I am very grateful

[Jess]

This is really good. Keep up the good work!

[Shadowkai]

Thank you, I was worried because this felt different than my usual work