Broken

feeling broken

In the deepest ocean,

in the darkest night.

I've felt a motion,

I've seen a light.

A lady asked,

"Are you a knight?

'Cause I know you fight."

I've answered "Right.".

But now I'm a broken wall.

I was hit with a wreckin' ball.

I'm havin' a problem with my soul.

Although I try, I always fall.

Reviews

[Teresa]

Very Good I love your writing, its very good. :)

[Shady]

Thanks. I'm so glad you loved it :D

[Empress Ophelia]

I am not a fan to rhyming poems but I was a fan of yours. You kept the thoughts short and simple, yet detailed. Thank you for this.

[Shady]

Thank you. I'm glad you liked it :D

[siobhan]

Very well written, good structure and I really liked the concept. Keep writing!

[Shady]

Thank you. I'm glad you liked it :D

[Najam Us Saher]

Love the rhyme. Also a well written poem. I really liked it.