A Story for the Years

a poem I wrote for a contest on DeviantART :)

Your eyes remind me of the ocean
A blue that's of the sea
It never fails to stop my breath
Each time you look at me.

Liquid topaz captured
Forever yours to keep
An everlasting, endless span
So unbelievably deep

A timepiece ticking softly
Away upon the sill
Slowly strips away the days
To take us back to yesteryears.
To the moment that we fell in love
In your eyes, I see it now
Your boutonniere and cummerbund
I in my soft blue satin gown.

Back then it was so different
We waited for so long
But when father finally did concede
That spark was far from gone

We took our time in getting here
But now so many years have passed
And each time I look in your eyes
I don't once wonder why it's last.

All this time together
Our golden years now done
But not a single thing has changed
Since our love was young

That bright blue flame can't be put out
Though eighty years are gone
And your eyes tell me you'll be here
When the clock hits eighty-one.

Author's Note

written at like 11pm, so keep that in mind? suggestions and such are welcome :D

Reviews

[Mica]

This reminds me so much of Up, in that beginning montage of them meeting and growing old together :)
I like how you set up a kind of timeline through the ages, and kept the theme of the eyes throughout to connect the younger years to the older. It gives this a very nice and pronounced flow, and it definitely feels reminiscent of song lyrics, in the sense that they're telling a story from the past to the present and onto thoughts of the future.
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