![]() Violet FieldA Poem by Silmara McGarryAs I walk down the road with you, I take the air and breathe it in, my heart that beats perfectly when you are near me.
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Purple - colour perfect for those that look both inwards and out. The colour regal yet embracing, touchable/ Your words here mean and offer truth in whatever hides within you. You have said what many could and cannot say.. tis beautiful in every way. Many, many mystic thanks.. joy within.
Posted 10 Months Ago1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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This conveys a time shared and enjoyed...
love the picture, too. Posted 8 Years Ago1 of 1 people found this review constructive. |
I see the perfection in your words and loyalty in your heart for love. True love really seems like the two hearts are connected since the beginning of lives. Simply Awesome Poem :)
Posted 8 Years Ago2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
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I like the way this starts out a little bland & then amplifies as it goes along, until the ending seems to have much more of a powerful message to convey. The first couplet seems bland to me becuz some of the ideas are a little predictable: ""walk down the road" . . . "breathe in the air" . . . "heart beats perfectly with you." This could be spiced up a bit by SHOWING us what the road looks like or what the air smells like or what the heartbeats feels like . . . details make a message more original & memorable. The final paragraph/stanza builds into a crescendo of hope & optimism.
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I like this, you have captured a feeling and converted a mood into a colour
Posted 8 Years Ago1 of 1 people found this review constructive. |
Oh be still my beating heart! This is so beautiful and romantic. I love all of it and purple being my fave, I love it even more! ~Shron
Posted 8 Years Ago1 of 1 people found this review constructive. |
Such a pleasant messagw for a greating card. The last stanza is heartfelt tenderness
Posted 8 Years Ago1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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So hopeful, I enjoyed this write.
You write very nicely Posted 8 Years Ago1 of 1 people found this review constructive. |
Breathtaking read! You conveyed a strong sense of beauty and feeling that made me know how you felt. "The beginning of our lives," there's something about this expression that I adore! Tyfs!
Posted 8 Years Ago1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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This is wonderfully done. I love the way the font almost highlights the picture. You write with a lot of emotion. Your devotional tone is also clear and pleasing.
Nice one Sil. You might want to add a question mark at the end of the fourth sentence. Relic :) Posted 8 Years Ago1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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Soft and hopeful thoughts for love.
"Give me the honour of looking into your eyes and entering your heart, where the way leads to your soul that had been connected with mine since the beginning of our lives." I liked the above lines. When we welcome love. Love can come. Thank you Silmara for sharing the excellent poetry. Coyote Posted 8 Years Ago1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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24 Reviews
Added on August 30, 2016
Last Updated on August 9, 2018
24 Reviews
Added on August 30, 2016
Last Updated on August 9, 2018
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Silmara McGarry
Instagram: @sil_mcgarry, United Kingdom
About
I often try to see the world with angels eyes... To leave people better then I found them, even if is just with a smile... I Love God above all... Simple love poems are my favourite... Most of wha.. more..Writing
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