Deleted Scenes

In every 'while of uncertainty, 

I've walked outside of my mind like a dead man’s soul 

Does to his expressionless body.

This is my new found hobby.

I’m no longer left sobbing; 

I'm just a wanderer in a forbidden lobby.

Reviews

[Alice Poésy]

In so few words you managed to explain that state of "numbness" a lot of people can't describe - and I myself can I identify with this poem frequently.

I also loved how you called this "Deleted Scenes"; the scenes that happened, but aren't seen by the public eye, just as this 'state' in the poem, normally goes unnoticed/unseen by those around us.

"I'm just a wanderer in a forbidden lobby." That last line is a killer.

Fantastic job. Round of applause for you!

[sinNsincerity]

The life of an outcast who love to be left alone...and travels from within hehe
Thank so much Alice, I highly enjoy your analysis and what makes it relatable to you.
-David.

[Myenigma]

i like the desensitized feelings in this, the metaphor of the mind of a dead man’s soul, personally I didn't really like the rhyme at the end, maybe you can change it to "body" to symbolize that with out emotions we are no longer human or something.

[Myenigma]

i just realized you had rhymed body already lol

[sinNsincerity]

I wrote this about how, in my opinion, it is important for me to get out of myself and lose myself...
To forget out my emotions and everything I think. To be lost with total control, so that I may find a greater self. A higher self.

[Myenigma]

oh i see now,

[Terry O'Leary]

One must miove on..good poem!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank You Terry.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Sometimes we all go there.. That place where bodies cannot enter in real time.. A place where we escape from this world and find another.
Very well penned!
I liked this very much! Read it thrice!

[sinNsincerity]

Yes! You see it just how I wanted people to see it! I'm so glad.
Thank you Jyoti!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You are welcome

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Good poem, Sin in Sincerity. It doesn't always have to be long to be well written. Love it. :) Rudi

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much Rudi.
And yes, most times less is more...

[Gaurav]

Ohh, its a wonderful thought-provoking work man. left me with a topic to delve my thinking in. Nice one.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed and spent the time to read it.

[IntellectualThug]

i like it a lot. it expresses so much in such few words. I like how it has this hidden dark theme that lures me in with curiosity.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you. I wrote this about how, in my opinion, it is important for me to get out of myself and lose myself...

[Kasey Nichole]

This is BRILLIANT. The emotions are so real and so raw. I love it. Great job.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for thinking so and I'm really glad that you enjoyed it Kasey!

[Kelsey Rogers]

An amazing poem that's leaving me craving more. This is my favorite of your work. You know how to leave the last line on a hook. Well done xx

[sinNsincerity]

That's amazing and so perfect. Thank you Kesley!

[alf]

Wow!! Sin. I knew I loved your writing, but this piece brings a real sharp reminder of just why that is!!! So honest and raw!!! Love it to bits!!!! alf

[sinNsincerity]

That means a lot hear and I really appreciate it Alf.

[Devious13]

very close the murder and anger that is in my heart today at least as i read this piece that is the thought that i took from it , then again that could be from the obsession of my recent tragic events but i love this piece as any , as usual great job

[sinNsincerity]

I'm more of stepping out of myself to gain on other point of view; but hey, that's really cool that you got that out of it.