Deleted Scenes

In every 'while of uncertainty, 

I've walked outside of my mind like a dead man’s soul 

Does to his expressionless body.

This is my new found hobby.

I’m no longer left sobbing; 

I'm just a wanderer in a forbidden lobby.

Reviews

[Alice Poésy]

In so few words you managed to explain that state of "numbness" a lot of people can't describe - and I myself can I identify with this poem frequently.

I also loved how you called this "Deleted Scenes"; the scenes that happened, but aren't seen by the public eye, just as this 'state' in the poem, normally goes unnoticed/unseen by those around us.

"I'm just a wanderer in a forbidden lobby." That last line is a killer.

Fantastic job. Round of applause for you!

[sinNsincerity]

The life of an outcast who love to be left alone...and travels from within hehe
Thank so much Alice, I highly enjoy your analysis and what makes it relatable to you.
-David.

[Semaj "I AM" Allure]

Reminds me of astral projection. The last line is delicately piercing to my spirit...love it.

[sinNsincerity]

Great insight! I'm glad to hear you enjoyed it.
Thank you for reading!

[Semaj "I AM" Allure]

you're very welcome;)

[Abyssmouse]

+1 on this comment. It's actually seems too specific to miss. ^^ Nicely done Sin!

[E G TEN]

Hey Sin, you hit the sweet spot on this write, I like the way you describe the wondering about into a deleted scene as is. Great piece, thanks for sharing! :-)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you man!

[MsJewel]

I can relate to your words - there are times when life gets so stressful, it is a relief to "walk outside my mind" as you have eloquently stated. You are quite clever and creative. Great writing!

Julie

[sinNsincerity]

That's so amazing that you were able to relate with this piece Julie.
Thank you so much for spending the time to read and leaving me your thoughts.
I highly appreciate it.

[JayceeC]

Sin, I like how you have descibed that feeling of being disconnected from the world or perhaps someone new in yours. Disconnecting is a wonderful protective instinct, as long as we do not allow it to blind us from gifts set in front of us. Jan

[sinNsincerity]

Yes, I totally agree with you Jan. It's more of a disconnection from myself because at times I can be so full of it lol And I have to remind myself to be selfless no matter what's going on around me.
I also wrote this about my anxieties. I stress out on so many things and drive myself insane when it's not such a big deal, so this displays me removing myself from those worries.
Thank you so much for your input Jan. It's always a pleasure to hear from you and always appreciated. Have a great day and I hope all is well. =D

[JayceeC]

Trust me I find myself doing that over many things. Recently when my husband had surgery. I could disconnect or go a little crazy with a panic attack.

[sinNsincerity]

Yea, I saw that you had written something about him.
I hope and pray that all is well with him Jan.

[JayceeC]

It's going fine but new routines take a while to get used to.

[sinNsincerity]

That's so great to hear. I will keep you and your family in my prayers Jan.

[JayceeC]

Thank you Sin

[sinNsincerity]

Always Jan!

[B]

Totally cool
So cool
I have nothing else to say

Your coolness did that to me

[sinNsincerity]

Hehe =D thanks

[sereenaoutloud]

Wow this is fantastic, daunting but fantastic lol
The format adds so much to this write it and the imagery superb...I could see someone who just needs a break, needs time to step out of their mind for awhile...escaping their body!
You know im a Sweet Sin fan and this write shows why!!
Awesome BFF :)

[sinNsincerity]

Hi Serrena! Oh you are too sweet to me. =D
Yes, and gladly I just had a good break from my inside life lol
I just got home from my Cousin's wedding this weekend.
It was such a blast and my spirit feels uplifted for now lol
How have you been bestie?

[sereenaoutloud]

Oh nothing like a wedding to life those spirits!!
Congrats to your cousin :)
I have been great Bestie...kids off school and keeping me Busy lol

[sereenaoutloud]

lift them too heheh

[sinNsincerity]

That's great to hear bestie.
I'm sure they do keep you busy bestie =D

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmi..]

The picture this paints is sad and lonely. Its graceful and pointed. I also liked the counting on it 3 lines, leads to 2 leads to 1. I felt that that a count down to being alone and numb.
Very meaningful.

[sinNsincerity]

I'm glad you noticed that because at first I had wrote it differently, but after reading it over and over and over- it sound much better this way in my head.
I love the meaning you got out of it.
I always love to hear what the poem means to them rather than just telling me it was good, so I appreciate that.
Thank you for reading Crystal.

[Rana]

Ah, you've almost made this one creepy. Uncertainty can be really upsetting, sometimes leading to despair. I could queerly relate because I find making decisions exhausting and mostly end up just the way you sketched, eternally wandering. Hope to meet you in the lobby, lol. It's quite a deliciously imaginative piece you've got here, loved it. :)

[sinNsincerity]

Uncertainty is my anxiety and one of my biggest fears, so I wrote this on how I get out of myself to gain relief from my anxieties. And I totally agree with how our plans or expectation will always have some form of let down and false promise, so now I have learned to just go with it and never place limitations on anything that comes my way...
I would love to meet you in the lobby.
Thank you so much for reading Rana.

[Jamestown]

A few sentences that explain a ton,
love the rhythm to this piece as well:)
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Sir!
Less is more sometimes they say... =D

[Dani The Unreviewed]

I think its great how you used simple words to put together this write.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for reading!