Deleted Scenes

In every 'while of uncertainty, 

I've walked outside of my mind like a dead man’s soul 

Does to his expressionless body.

This is my new found hobby.

I’m no longer left sobbing; 

I'm just a wanderer in a forbidden lobby.

Reviews

[Alice Poésy]

In so few words you managed to explain that state of "numbness" a lot of people can't describe - and I myself can I identify with this poem frequently.

I also loved how you called this "Deleted Scenes"; the scenes that happened, but aren't seen by the public eye, just as this 'state' in the poem, normally goes unnoticed/unseen by those around us.

"I'm just a wanderer in a forbidden lobby." That last line is a killer.

Fantastic job. Round of applause for you!

[sinNsincerity]

The life of an outcast who love to be left alone...and travels from within hehe
Thank so much Alice, I highly enjoy your analysis and what makes it relatable to you.
-David.

[jeannemarie coulter]

excellent...simple and yet expressing so much...thank you...

[sinNsincerity]

Why thank you! I would like to hear what I made you think about...

[Double T]

This is good work right here my friend. :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for thinking so and reading.
What did it make you feel?

[dan]

SiS, I like this piece both for the words AND structure. The brevity used to express your idea gives the reader a sense of immediacy, to take the writing to heart and absorb the meaning. I am gladly accepting your friend request, but I ask one thing. I have a hard time keeping up with all of my reviewing obligations for all of my friends so I ask that you send me read requests. This will GUARANTEE that I will get to your write for a proper review. take care...dan

[sinNsincerity]

Why thank you for that Dan, I'm really glad to hear that you enjoyed it.
And I would only hope that readers take it to heart because it comes from mine.
There's no worries about reviews, but I do appreciate them.
Although, I will surly send you read request.
Have a great one.

[Sindu]

Sense of tranquility settles in reading this. Curious title.

[sinNsincerity]

That's awesome! Thank you for reading Miss Sindu =D

[micky]

Nice flow simple but thought provoking

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for reading Micky.

[Ankita]

Hey..why did you name it deleted scenes?

[sinNsincerity]

It refers to the things in my life I might think twice about telling some one.
I would love to hear why you thought why I named it that.

[Ankita]

Well I thought it's because you are refering to some memories of yours that you would like to forget..
You know like you wanna delete those scenes from the mind..

[sinNsincerity]

Yes, I totally understand what you are saying.
I myself, feel that once I write a memory into a poem or a short story-
it is deleted from my mind. Even the good ones
That's how it's always been for me...
And the beautiful thing about writing nonfiction is that we can always go back and relive these forgotten stories.

[Ankita]

Well...try and keep the good ones in the memory itself :)

And it's more important to live than to relive.. :)
Although I totally agree with you :)

[Pratik Mishra]

Keep up the good work:)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for reading.