Places

Where you and I go.

 

Let's go, Love

I'll take you again

Remember all the places we've went?

The ocean a mirror, the sky a window

I'm sure you couldn't forget..

 

Come along, Dear

Off to the moon again

We climbed a silver staircase, raced to the summit,

Stars all around, Ahead and full sail

Your eyes so alive in wonder...

 

Here we are, Kid

Here at this place again, this room full of music

Alone in this concert hall, waltzing to the orchestra

performing the soundtrack of us.

Take me back again.

 

Follow me, Love

At the last place again

Our park in full autumn, leaves colouring in the wind

Park bench for two, fly our kites in the blue

That piano playing off in the distance.

Author's Note

Haha, kind of obscure, I know.

Reviews

[Sasha]

It is a little obscure but not headache inducing obscure like some of these romantic poems I see around. I understood what you were getting at and thought you used some nice imagery. The one thing I didn't understand is "Here we are, Kid". It seemed odd to address your SO that way, but I've heard worse.
Good job.

[Aleah]

All I can say about this is

[_thesovo]

Awww. This is cute(: Love it.

[Julianna Marie]

Love love love the imagery in this one !

"The ocean a mirror, the sky a window
I'm sure you couldn't forget.."

^Love the metaphors

[qaralynn]

oeehh cute poem..like it

[FeliciaS (Poetic Prince..]

love it, very romantic ;)

[Ashley.M.E]

I really like this poem I don't know it might be me I think this line
Remember all the places we've went?
would sound better at
Remember all the places we've (been)?

other then that I loved it, I could see everything happen you have a since for poetry

[Silent Siren]

Aw, this is cute Tad. The opening stanza is very strong.

Some other lines that really appealed to me were:

"Alone in this concert hall, waltzing to the orchestra performing the soundtrack of us" & "Park bench for two, fly our kites in the blue"

However, the end leaves me with a feeling that the wole matter is partly left up in the air, perhaps?

[Julie]

This is GREAT! theres definitly a LOT of imigary... u have such creative writing...

[Jennifer Pennington]

This is a rather sweet poem, not really all that obscure. You worded things very nicely and subliminally. Well done!

[Alaska]

This kind of reminds me of "The Places You'll Go" by Dr. Seuss. :)