This City is Full Of Surprises!

This City is Full Of Surprises!

A Chapter by TheGmGoken
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Damai and Pudd expect a boring city compared to their last town. But they're surprise.

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The day looks great! It's sunny outside, the kids are getting ready for school and most important it's a new start for these two young boys! After leaving their previous district for unknown reasons. Pudd and Damai find themselves in district 5 and now attending "Burning Flames High"! Let's go check on our little heroes.
Damai: Pudd wake up damn it!
Pudd: Huh? It's time already?
Damai: Yea sadly this school starts 3 hours earlier than "Kenichi Squad". And get this bro, it ends 3 hours later to.
Pudd:  That's lame. Ugh. Lemme go get dress.

Pudd goes into his closest and pull out his previous school attire. 
Pudd: This brings horrible memories. 
Damai:........ 

Damai thinks back of the dark day. Rain is pouring down and everyone is crying at the sight of blood dripping from the window. The flashback is cut off right before we see what happen.

Pudd: We should't think of that day. It's a fresh start here. OW! Stupid blade. 
Damai: Pudd you don't have to dress to fight for school you idiot! 
Pudd: You're right I doubt this school has any skilled fighters. Probably some boxing or wrestling at best.
Damai: *Looks out the window* At least the babes here are hot.
Pudd: Yea maybe so. Let's go!
Pudd:....Bro? Damn it he's already down there. HEY WAIT UP!

Pudd goes running after Damai. Who seems to be interested in the girls who walked past.  Pudd catches up to Damai. Much to his dismay. Because of that the girls gets away.

Damai: Damn it Pudd! You killing my mojo! Those are the hottest girls ever. 
Pudd: How lame you still say mojo haha! 
Damai: SHUT UP! You have no experience in dating how would know how to pick up women. 
Damai: Whatever. Don't even respond back. Let's just take this shortcut and......

POP! POP! POP! 
Pudd: The hell?
Damai: Those aren't normal gunshots. They're here too?
Pudd: The Red Headed Gang!
Damai: They're robbing those two girls! 
Pudd: S**t...Damai. You know we can't. 
Damai: We have to. We both know they'll do more than rob them.
Pudd: No! Don't you dare.

HELP HELP! Is heard everywhere as people panic. No one knows what to do and how to handle them. The Red Headed grunt begins choking one of the girls.

Grunt 1: Yo. You're name bad looking. How about you keep the diamonds and give me something else.
Grunt 2: Guri! This one isn't giving up her money. 
Grunt 1: Kill her. The boss gave us permission. I want to have fun with the babe.
Girl 1: SOMEONE PLEASE! HELP! 
Grunt 1: The screamers are always the best.
Girl 2: Bella! 
Grunt 2: Shut up! *Points Gun at Girl 2 face*
Grunt 2: Go talk to her in hel....! GAH!

Grunt 2 is suddenly knocked out cold. Behind him is a girl with a mask, green hair, blue eyes, and a body jumpsuit. She takes out a one hand sword labeled "Alonell". A very rare sword. What is she doing with it? 
???: I suggest you leave now.  Unless you want to die.
Grunt 1: You're the girl the boss was talking about.  *Throws girl 1 onto the ground*. *Cracks knuckles*. So lets see why boss have RHG looking for you.
Damai: Holy s**t!
Pudd: Let's head to school. We both know the winner of this. But who is that girl? How she get the Alonell?!
Damai: This town just a bit more fun
Pudd: Yea. *Puts on headphones*. Maybe so

The boys walk along to school as the mystery girl attacks and defeats the Grunts with ease. The police come and take the grunts to jail for the biggest payday of their lives for bringing in a RHG member. The girl with mask disappear into the shadows. Where did she go?  An unknown hero? Perhaps she's the real main character of the story
Pudd and Damai: OH VERY FUNNY!
End of Chapter 1

This chapter cover page is Pudd with his headphones on.


© 2014 TheGmGoken


Author's Note

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It's interesting how you write out the dialogue like a screenplay. The constant exclamation points are a little distracting to me... It's like a novel on Prozac. Just my two cents.

The story itself is intriguing. It's almost like reading the text version of an Anime. I feel like maybe there could be more description to the story. And perhaps a bit of editing on the grammar side, but you are probably aware of that.

All in all, interesting work. :)



Posted 9 Years Ago


Very interesting, I really like it. :-)

Kaze~

Posted 9 Years Ago



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Added on May 18, 2014
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