Like a knife

This was a bit inspired by the song "Like a knife" by secondhand serenade

Delicate dagger whisper to me

Promise glee and ecstasy

Your blade so cold

But your handle so warm

Calls upon the roughest storms

A light scrape is all I ask

Bring back the passion from my past

The gentle feel of heaven’s touch

The burn from hell I love so much

Icy shards penetrate my wound

Delicate poison that drastically swoons

Burning sensation running through my veins

Pulsing thoughts and images through my brain

Red rose petals drops from my wrist

Mesmerizing feelings of agony and bliss

Shivers felt across my hand

Continues as the blade depends and expands

The rose petals kept leaking out

As tiny snowflakes begin to sprout

Frost filling my bloody abyss

Lips begging for one last kiss

An eclipse of warmth, an eclipse of light

I slowly start losing my sight

Rain merges with the pool of petals

This anguish quickly becomes lethal

I breathe no more, I’m forgotten

Noticing the veil of darkness that has risen

The blade in my wrist disappears without warning

Left within this cold and depressing ending

Condemned to a glacial existence

Abandoned with dreams of exuberance

Turning into glacier

Dreaming of an happy ever after

In love you only fall twice

When it strikes you like a knife

Author's Note

Please do comment! :DD

Reviews

[X]

This is awesome man. Great imagery and word choice. Those opening lines, structured how they are, are eye catching, to say the least. Good stuff.

X

[Alejandra]

Wow! Amazing! This is very nicely written. I love the metaphors. Your use of imagery is incredible. Very emotional and powerful. Great job on this piece. Two thumbs up. I really enjoyed this. :)

[GlacialStars]

Haha thanks a lot you xD Go secondhand serenade!

[Alejandra]

No problem.

[C.C. Marx]

First off, fall for you by secondhand serenade is a favorite of mine and although im unfamiliar with this song im sure its just as good and second, beautifully done! The details, the emotion, the imagery! Fantastic!

[DIVYA]

Death made so welcome with your words. The forbidden made so easy. I loved the ending. Your use of imagery is very timely to give the wanted effect. Please keep writing and sharing.

[DivineButterfly85]

I love this poem, you are amazing with your words!

[GlacialStars]

Thank ya haha!

[Damien Davison]

Wow, very dark and beautifully delivered. Very nice job here!

[GlacialStars]

Yeah it was a combination of merging something good and passionate with something that everyone fears. It was mostly to show how people could give themselves away for love

[Mir]

They way this is written makes you able to feel the emotions that you're trying to condem! I'm extremeley glad Lost Soul requested me to read this! If not I would have missed out on an excelent piece of work!

[GlacialStars]

:DD I was requested? Man talk about an ego boost! Thank you so much for reading and for reviewing!read more:DD I was requested? Man talk about an ego boost! Thank you so much for reading and for reviewing!

[Mir]

Haha you're welcome!:)

[The Invisible Girl]

A very powerfully poem!! Totally agree with .Lost Soul. "this is an epic poem" 100/100

[.Lost Soul.]

This poem is EXTREMELY POWERFUL. I could feel shivers running down my spine as I read this. This piece hits so many emotional levels for many people and it's great. This is an intense, heart-breaking piece that makes you stop and think for a bit. I read this poem three times before I found the right words to say. Some of my favorite parts/lines/stanzas were
"Shivers felt across my hand
Continues as the blade depends and expands
The rose petals kept leaking out
As tiny snowflakes begin to sprout" ~ I loved the personification in this, I think comparing the blood to rose petals set an off mood to it (in a good way though) Also: "In love you only fall twice
When it strikes you like a knife" ~ Wow, what a way to end a poem.
Dude, this an epic poem. I like it, a lot. 100/100

[GlacialStars]

Ah ^//^ thank you very very much! If only you knew what this meant to me haha thanks for recommending me and thank you for such an awesome and uplifting review! All the messages and all the hidden blood stains in there you found! Thank you oh so very much for reading! I could hug you! XD