makes me think of being cornered by a hungry wolf, which would be terrifying. im not sure if you were going for some other creature or not, and it might be because i just read your wolf lune haiku. in any case, knowing your own demise is imminent is truely horrifying. very nicely done.
makes me think of being cornered by a hungry wolf, which would be terrifying. im not sure if you were going for some other creature or not, and it might be because i just read your wolf lune haiku. in any case, knowing your own demise is imminent is truely horrifying. very nicely done.
Highly imaginative and haunting. The impression of fear and horror was also kicked up by your use of the senses, I was virtually able to step into your perceptual world and experience that moment. I shelved this one :)
"by the pricking of my thumbs" well, i have to say this was an engaging read ...very well done and quite scary except the phrase "hungry pants" i thought of blue jeans which had not eaten....therefore hungry...don't know why, just my sick sense of humor i suppose. very good write!
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11 Years Ago
Yes, I can see why you'd think of blue jeans when reading the phrase hungry pants. I didn't think of.. read moreYes, I can see why you'd think of blue jeans when reading the phrase hungry pants. I didn't think of that. I do think that will need some fixing. Thanks very much.
11 Years Ago
i don't mean to sound critical, but, i have a very weird sense of humor and the words "hungry pants".. read morei don't mean to sound critical, but, i have a very weird sense of humor and the words "hungry pants" sound like a cheap joke to me.....you know, porno titles and such
11 Years Ago
perhaps "hungrily panting" would be a fix?
11 Years Ago
Yes, I see where your coming from!!! And I do agree!
When Venus gets too close catfish have been known to come up out of the water onto the shore, feed awhile, then go back in.
It's business as usual in the Apocalypse. And business is very good right.. more..