Black

Silver moon shining
Guardian of onyx night
Yellow eyes watch you

Reviews

[Wendy Johnson]

it is amazing that such description can be put together in such a small piece. I like this one.

[Eamon]

Oh Jesus Our Lord, what talent! How we must delve into every syllable since your genius only allows you three lines without punctuation.

Help me understand your struggle!

E.

[Merancapeman]

The thought of the moon as the guardian of night is a very compelling thought. Your haiku seems true in my perception of the night as well, but that's not why I like it. I like it because of it's subtle yet filled meaning...

I'm sorry, I'm not awake, nor am I creative this morning. I'm in a bad mood, but I suppose it means something if I can have the potential to go crazy with negativity and still like your haiku.

[Misha London]

well, i'm not sure i'm the best critic of poetry, but i like this very much.

very vivid.
nicely done!

[Maxinne Marie]

Haiku may be short, but it is very striking. Beautifully written! The title caught my eye as well, since I love the color black. And this poem, wow! Night skies always amaze me. =)

[Candid Writer]

Like I've been saying this whole week, I have developed a new appreciation for Haikus. I think it was the challenge to write my first Haiku that brought out the understanding and appreciation.

This is truly beautiful and powerful. I like that we both have a Haiku with the same title, but took two entirely different approaches/ideas.

And yes, I have been under the stars many a times -- makes me miss home thinking about it.