The Abyss

Teal waves break against the sand

White froth turns to gold

Bringing treasures of a foreign land

And places never told

Surrender to its pull and find

Its deceptive peace is left behind

The teal becomes abysmal blue

And gold becomes an inky black

The wild shows its true face

Or shows none at all

Upon seeing this grandeur

The other world seems so small

Reviews

[Corwin T.]

Love the description here. I can even taste the sea while I read this magnificent poem. The "And gold becomes an inky black." is well used here because it disrupts the flow of the poem. At first, to some readers, this may bring on a distraction. But for me, it halts the flow, and really makes you think of the sea and the imagery becoming visualized in the readers mind. Thank you for posting!! Great job.

[Dark Rider]

I love the descriptions. It made it easy to picture the whole scene clearly in my mind. I loved it. Great job! :)

[Salar Majak]

wow i really like how you describe the whole scene, seams majestic to think about, sea does give us a great satisfaction and inspiration, beautifully displaid,

[William C Jones III]

Just reading this piece... makes me want to go to the beach. Oh the nostalgia. Great write :)

[Courtney]

The imagery in this is astounding.

Surrender to its pull and find
Its deceptive peace is left behind
The teal becomes abysmal blue
And gold becomes an inky black

This part is so beautiful yet dark.. This is truly an amazing poem, Thank you for this! :)

[A.E. Surdam]

Beautiful imagery. Great write.