Stuck Here

I'm out of my mind, but it's okay because you're still mine

I'm stuck here
In my head
With all these voices
In my mind
Trying to make me feel alright
But in my mind
There are a thousand way to go away
And in my life, it's just one way
But it's so far away than your eyes
You driving me crazy
And I don't know how I'm gonna leave you, babe
I'm in trouble now
And you're in my head
I don't know how to make you feel at home
And I don't know how to get you out of
My mind

Reviews

[Ted Kniffen]

"I just can't get you out of my mind"
A very good little poem, Wafa, and the sentiment is one I understand well. I can feel the confusion in this and the inability to deal with the relationship.

There are a few issues with grammar, but those are easily corrected. Read your poem out loud to see if you can catch the areas that need adjusting...I understand English may not be your first language...and you're really only dealing with nuance.

You have a good piece...keep writing.

[Wafa]

Thank you so much!!!!!
I really appreciate your review! 💕
Yes it's not my first language, But I wish I'll get better.

Lots of love 💗

[Ted Kniffen]

I'm sure you will.

[Kesch (Finding Julia)]

feelingful write, emotional and tugging

[Wafa]

Thank you!