Cotton Candy and Gravel

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Cotton Candy and Gravel

 

 

I've cheated

My feet thrusting against

The pebbles of the crumpling cliff

Before my heart cries against me

Defying the frosty air

Eyes closed and senses

Peeled and polished

So that I can clearly see

 

I'm falling

And the voices of the downhill ghosts

Beckon yet another unfortunate soul

 

Unfortunate. Maybe

Shaking hands with a Shadow

And swapping the kind, soft grey days

For the luscious spectrum of a utopia he reflected

In the glass frame of my sight

 

I'm falling

Faster than the rain

And more furious

Than the electric blue thunder

 

I'm falling

In my hand I had painfully clutched

A worn out silver eye frame

With a fading blue pupil

The more rapidly I dive down

The colder my fingertips freeze

But the silver eye is melting

And I am beginning to forget

what it once symbolized

 

I'm falling

Now what to believe

Now where to tumble and decease

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

It is beautiful for the moment

Despite the anxiety

The serenity of seeing nothing

But fog and grey-sprinkled cream white

The slight rays of the ancient dead sun

Seeping through

Like a cotton candy

That has slipped off

Small baby-skin palms

Smudged by street gravel

And the child's tears

 

I'm falling

My breath evading

Tearing away from me

But my hate

Still trickling in streams

around my forehead

Stitched into a crown of karma

That makes my limbs quiver

Sickens the pit of my stomach

A crown of thorns, needles,

And the flesh I impatiently tore off

Your neck with my bare teeth.

Author's Note

*Image(1): Dream about falling down
*By ~bucz
*Link: http://bucz.deviantart.com/art/Dream-about-falling-down-62582604?q=boost%3Apopular%20falling%20into%20the%20dark&qo=9

*Image(2): Cotton Candy
*By ~Missmidnight666
*Link: http://missmidnight666.deviantart.com/art/Cotton-Candy-128886396?q=boost%3Apopular%20cotton%20candy%20cloud&qo=17

Reviews

[M.Babu]

Firstly off...the image at the beginning really pulled me into the heart of the storytelling. Your words as always were carefully picked and you delivered them with utmost precision.

Loved this:

"I'm falling
My breath evading
Tearing away from me
But my hate
Still trickling in streams
around my forehead"

Nice!
~M.Babu~

[J. R.]

Excellent imagery and choice of words.

[Wondering Mind]

Exceptional imagery and word use as always.

[Misty Blue Eyes]

WOW .. holy crap

[Janice Ann]

This is wrecking havoc on my heart! The standing, the falling, the rain...you took me to that cliff and had me falling. You have wonderful way with words. I was sad reading this but took joy in your talent!

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

Such a vivid place you took us, traveling with the rain in the fall.

[Calypso]

"I'm falling faster then rain." Love it.

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing journey in your words. Photos made your words come alive and create a wild vision in my head. The poem took me on a wild ride into thoughts and desire. Sometime hard to know purpose and reason. Must hold on to the thread of a hope. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[BlackCl0ud]

An insider and conter out look to the decent of depression and suicidial tendencies . . . Creative, descriptive, engaging and honest. ~ BlackCl0ud

[The Cougar's Den]

Wow! Made me remember a quote I recently read - Suicide is man's way of telling God, "You can't fire me - I quit." ~Bill Maher