If this were our shore

Love at the beach

~

If this were our shore

I would

build you a castle

Using the sand

of a

magical dune

 

Coat it in stardust

to shimmer

your beauty

It's tower would

reach halfway

up to the moon

 

Seashells and coral

would lead

to the entrance

Nothing more

wonderful

there'd ever be

 

Watching the waves

as the tide

comes to greet us

You in my arms

and a

beautiful sea

 

If this were our shore

I would

build you a castle

The sort of thing

that our

dreams are made of

 

But we don't need

beaches or

seashells or castles

All that we need

we will

build with our love

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Pete]

touching. sounds good to me. a straight to the heart write. so much for shovel and pail not to mention worrying about the tide ... :)

[willweb]

Thanks so much my friend.

[William Michael Reeves]

That's sweet. Does your love receive all these poems on paper piled at her feet? Every day! Magical dunes made of sand that becomes molten glass in the heat of your lovemaking later. Then the castle becomes eternal. No tidal wave can wash it away.

[willweb]

Thanks my friend. No, I can't say that anyone receives these but my fellow poets here at WC.

[Betty Hermelee]

YEA, forget the seashore and castles, love is what matters! but seriously, I love the writing in this piece ; it's dreamy and like fantasy land; seashells and sand beneath one's feet is crunchy and warm and sand castles are fun too, what what really counts is the love between the two...
love it
Best, B

[willweb]

Thank you so much Betty. Yep, many things are fun but in the end it is the love that matters.

[Betty Hermelee]

Indeed! You're very welcome Will.
Best, B

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

“Seashells and coral
would lead
to the entrance
Nothing more
wonderful
there'd ever be”
…so magical, pristine, tender and pure. Will, your words are like flute notes and this poem is written in the musical scale of true love. Definitely should be a song lyric, a ballad. Beautiful language, authenticity, flow, imagery, alliteration throughout. You are a WordMaster my friend!

[willweb]

Such kind words Annette, I will need a bigger hat after this. : ) I appreciate you my friend. Your kindness always touches my heart.

[Ladysue]

This is a precious piece of writing. Full of love.This poem makes me smile, fills me with joy and made my heart flutter. Lovely and genuine words.

[willweb]

Thank you Ladysue. I am happy you liked this one so much.

[Silmara McGarry]

Now, this is my kid of poem! Absolutely wonderful from start to finish, specially the end of it .. and such a pleasurable read. This is how love should be. A woman with virtues will always choose a man that can protect her as she should protect him. I truly love it!!!
Well done from me!
:-)))

[willweb]

Thank you so very much for your kind thoughts on my little poem. I appreciate you taking the time to stop by and read this.

[Silmara McGarry]

You are most welcome dear!

[DIVYA]

A complete poem on love and its sincere and ardent intentions. Indeed, with such amazing love, little else is needed in the world. Life and its tangles sort themselves out. Kudos!

[willweb]

Thank you Divya. You always bring such joy to me when you visit my work.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the castle is a representation...the real thing is the love that is evident throughout this poem.
Eternal...bigger than the ocean that holds that beach.
j.

[willweb]

That is pretty much it my friend. Thanks so much.

[Lorry]

This is smooth with a capital SMOO!
Now, don't mind me ladies, just passing through to pick up some tips on smoothness and ill be on my way.
Have a great weekend Will. 😊

[willweb]

Thank my friend. I am happy you pushed through that crowd of women to send me good wishes. : )

[Lorry]

Well, I know how uncomfortable it can be when all those ladies demand your attention. We'll, I say I know how it feels, but usually I'm the only sausage at a vegan barbecue, but I can imagine your pain 😊

[willweb]

Hey, someone has to toss the salad. : )

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

Hellos, Willweb, I really like this poem,
good evening, hope yerr having a great evening,
the shore is a wonder and the sand so greeting of waves,
the embrace makes me think of the movies, seeing
something that is so hard to grasp, great write!
----1809 Black Plague December

[willweb]

Thanks so very much for this nice review of my work. I appreciate your time and support

[1809 Black Plague December]

most welcome dear.