~ Energy

~ Energy, Elisa Laura, Life, Death, Dead, Skeletons, Love, Eternity, Southern Europe, Graveyard, Me, You, Us, We.

~ Energy

 

Under the sunset in our vision,

And some shadows of the grapes,

 

I felt your warmth, upon my skin;

You smelled like dusty earth mixed

With my old volcanic soil,

 

The cemetery was flowered

With cherry blossom,

 

But only we could see the

Other side so green,

 

You embraced my soul, and life,

With your dead smile embroiled in

Beauty,

               You knew me, as I you…

 

Your dark hair

Danced down my cheeks

With the help of the wind,

 

And our bones became one…

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Music by BrunuhVille...

Enjoy xx

Reviews

[joshua deathdealer]

I am stunned. This is gorgeous. I agree. lol Perfectly done!! The visuals and romantics lol are to die for. Such beautiful energy felt here while engaged in this story of two dead lovers. Soul-mates.

Under the sunset in our vision,
And some shadows of the grapes,

I felt your warmth, upon my skin;

The beginning is so powerful, setting the air for the depth it precedes. The idea of the dust mixing. Being at last complete. Looking with eager eyes at the other side while in each other arms.. Wow! This poem is perfect Elisa. Truly xx

" You knew me, as I you…"

Thank you so much dear soul-mate of me, you understood this one so well, couldn't miss ;) xxx I'm grateful for your words...

[joshua deathdealer]

You are most welcome darling Elisa. Thank you for sharing such an amazing piece. xx

Thank you deary for being always here... with me. Bestie. I miss you, can't wait to hear your music, and fantastic conversations... so much to tell... -xx-

[Michelle N. H.]

The music mixed with your words is almost too much to handle. I have goose bumps. This piece is so romantic, simply a brilliant description of true love, beautiful in life and beyond :) I was really, very moved. A fantastic work of art this is, just incredible.

Dear one, thank you so very much, for your heart, on my page. Dutch: Je bent de beste!!!! "Du er den bedste" :D see? you make me wanna learn Danish. Thank you. I will be back soon for you, Kære søster... :D

[Michelle N. H.]

Haha, that was perfectly translated :D Dankeschön, liebe schwester. Du bist erstaunlich ^^ (I hope that was too!). I will return to here as well, in good time, every now and again :)

Oh I love your German! (we only speak Dutch lol) it's pretty almost the same though he he... Ich spreche auch Deutch. :D thanks for all sweetie. Be back soon, must drive to Germany now lol, what a coincidence....

[Michelle N. H.]

I see, haha. That really was some coincidence :) Then drive safely and have a lovely trip, ik ga je zien! :)

Ik zie je snel lieve zus! :) dank je wel! haha.... how funny! perfect!!! x

[Michelle N. H.]

Yay! I hit the right language this time, haha. Pas goed op jezelf, tot de volgende keer ^^

You did so well, not one typo!! :) perfect dear! xo

[topsyturvy]

Wow, that was... Wow, I'm at a loss for words. That was incredible. Uhmm, I'm sorry I'm still stunned. But you need to know, it was so beautiful.

Edit: I read other reviews and yes it seems as though youve captured our feelings so well, we are in agreement that this piece is quite stunning! I can't explain it.

I can't thank you enough my sweet friend.... xx :)

[Lover Of Words]

I am stunned you are godly talented you leave a young one like me having to read everyone of your poems more then once every time girl you leave me breathless you have such a beautiful way with words

Thank you so much, for coming by again dear. :) happy with your support. x

[Lover Of Words]

You will always have my support anything for a sis!! :)

[Fernando Dardón]

If it wasn't because of joshua deathdealer's review I couldnt be able to understand the whole poem.
There's hidden energy on this poem, like the hidden secrets of a tomb.
It's like the treasure you just found. I felt on this poem like I had a treasure map, and 'till now I wasn't able to follow the map's route to the treasure: it's whole meaning.
I guess energy never ends it's cycle, even after death...
PERFECT!!!!

Yes, thank you so much for the review brother, Joshua, and me, read minds, sometimes without words, he can understand my poetry, it's a true channeling happening. Such a good soul-buddy he is. Now, you too seem to understand it so well.... :) thank you for a most lovely and deep review. I so appreciate it. Besos

[Fernando Dardón]

:-) you are welcome!

Thanks again, hope you had a great dinner :D

[Pax]

So romantic, the title on which it really draws me to read this piece again and again. It's like an energy to feed your romantic soul. sigh... lovely!

Thanks my sweetest lil brother, love you tons... you understand the me, and I the you! ;) xx

[Pax]

a pleasure always, hugs....

Thank you with whole my heart. On the other review, I couldn't respond sigh.. so the whole thing stays on your profile, with the comments ;) good luck at work (if you have to work today). x

[Matt Sayer]

Stories engraved in stone and narrated by wispy souls long departed. Lovers dancing twixt the cemetery spires, reliving their sweet histories in eternal un-life, the woes of the physical realm forgotten memories. A superb sepulchral poem, Elisa! :)

This is how I see our future.... ;) thank you so much my friend, your brain is understanding mine so well... Matt :))

[PearlPoet]

There is one word comes to my mind after I finished reading this poem
~duality~ and this clever playfulness of “matter and antimatter” that gives the reader a fantastic roller-coaster ride of feelings and that’s not enough for you ~smiles~ for you just enslave the reader's soul with your closing line “And our bones became one…” such a depth, such a honesty

Köszönöm a szót truly.... this was a dream I had I think 1,5 year ago... but I talked to someone about it, just never made it a poem, until I re-dreamt it, (that happens often with me)... it's a new jacket the poem wears, to forlorn days. But it still has the "duality" yes, until the day, maybe I turn to dust and ashes... thank you for your wonderful comment, my dear dear friend... appreciate you xo!!!

[PearlPoet]

hmmmm Interesting, a dream that you re-dreamt... En is nagyon szeretlek teged draga Baratom ~winks~

Én is szeretlek kedves barátom ... :) that is interesting isn't it? maybe I should think twice, geo, or in quadruplicate with this one... ;)

[Sugar Plum ♥]

Lovely and sad romantic image, picture as if from medieval times, but with modern concept. What I love much! Grapes and cherry blossoms and green in contrast to the graves and sadness of smile and bones...Only overcoming the death in energy of love could be forever. And my favorite are these verses:
I felt your warmth, upon my skin;
You smelled like dusty earth mixed
With my old volcanic soil,

So many elements in one, so magical!

:: nour ::
:: 07.12.13::

And again here, you know how to review, my dear friend... I am sometimes awestruck how you reach so deep :) (in all good)... you felt the volcanic soil, it's a dream of me, to be one day home ;) many thanks my sweet Sister xo :)

[Jacquelene Vanessa More..]

simply beautiful, every word danced in my heart.

Oh thank you very much J. V. :) I'm glad it danced in your heart...

[David Scott]

Like the explosion of volcanic magma dusting the fields with ash feeding the grapes to be harvested and stored to age perfectly into tomorrow's wine. One day, the complexity will be appreciated by the experienced palate of your well traveled soul.

Lovely Eli!

What a beautiful futures insight and vision David... let us drink the wine together then... in afterlife... with Robbie, Horizon, Belle, and all our friends... I think we are happy then! :D p.s. I hope your travel was cool, lovely and that you're bronzed like a ... (you may fill that in lol) How was Cancun? well we talk soon x