~ Paradise

~ Paradise? E.L. Elisa Laura, FreeStyle, Thoughts, Fantasy, Fiction, Love, Romance, Over? Hope? Still? Rebirth

~ Paradise

 

 

I air kissed you, from afar,

     My hand upon my mouth,

  My love, I did reach out; 

 

And well dear, to your land,

 

I lived in a dream for way too long,

      In darkened visions, of you and me;

 

      Now the day is here;

  I arrived in our Paradise,

 

The fields of hope, and trust

 

Nothing is more intense,

     To smell your skin, to touch your hair;

   And to burn with you to dust

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

 

 

Author's Note

Feel free, Enjoy! xx
Music: "Artesia - Y Ladi Wen"

Reviews

[Thaddius]

Timeless, ethereal feel. Maybe its the music but you remind me of Arwen from Lord of the Rings in your expression of that passion.

'my love, I did reach out; and well dear, to your land' captures your way of speaking so nicely, your soft maternal instinct for this lover. It makes you feel close. the 'to burn with you to dust' line, I can picture tears streaming down Arwen's face as she looks at the relic of Striders bust, condemned to immortality. This is the most powerful montage in the Award Winning Trilogy that I was raised on, so don't take that complement lightly!

Thank you so much Thaddius, for a most nice review, I feel flattered you see Arwen in this. I know the Trilogy very well, read the book more than twice :) thank you for your effort and time.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"to burn with you to dust"
love that line...and yes, when we have not seen that loved one for so long because of distance, the meeting again is so filled with heat that we seem to burn up in each other's embrace.

Thank you so much my friend, for your great review, yes... We burn up often in eachothers arms... (embrace).

[Carl Drake Barnard]

And to burn with you to dust?? That doesn't seem very romant... All and all seems like everything is going wel :) so glad to hear very well written piece I enjoyed the read :)

Why not romantic? :) I'm curious, I saw it as very romantic, to die with your true love, into a new rebirth, of ashes... :) thank you sweetie for your wonderful thoughts, I appreciate it....

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Hehe to burn to dust... Its a bit violent Hehe why not like and so our bodies fade by time but our love remains :)

[Pryde Foltz]

Nothing is more intense,
To smell your skin, to touch your hair;
And to burn with you to dust

Very intriguing last lines, here, Elisa. Not your ordinary love poem.

Exactly ;-) keen insight Oh Nay! :) thanks a lot xo

[Lover Of Words]

This is so amazing my heart skipped a beat with every word such beautiful magic

Thank you sweetheart... your words mean the world to me. xx :)

[Lover Of Words]

Your words mean the world to me too my dear

Your trust, and friendship is golden love... you will know when I'm ready to be fully back here, how much.

[Lover Of Words]

Take your time love

I will... thank you dear. xxxxx

[Lover Of Words]

no love thank you