Life

Life

A Poem by Hannah Jocks
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This is a personal poem. About being treated unfairly and favoritism and how your favorite is bound to turn on you one way or another...

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Favorites will perish from your heart

Your least will never depart


Are you aware of your despair

or do you numbly not care


If that is so joy will certainly go

leaving you with tears and regrets in tow

© 2012 Hannah Jocks


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I really love this poem. It's very meaningfull and comes from something everyone will experience in life. Everyone can relate so you have provided some beautiful writing for everyone, everywhere, Thank you for sharing

Posted 6 Years Ago


I really like this!! I would suggest that you add some more to your poems and make them more from your heart. (not that I'm very good at it lol) :D

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hannah Jocks

7 Years Ago

Thankyou that was very helpful(:
Lovely efforts.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Thanks Rory! That really helps. I'm not too good at poems so that does help. If you could give me more tips that would be great. I really want to get better at poems.

Thanks John, that nice of you to say! And i love writers cafe! Its amazing. But of course i worry, like a lot of ppl might that someone will steel you ideas and get theres published. Is there anyway to help that? If not what ever i guess.

Posted 7 Years Ago


A really original style and thats always a good thing to me at least like the way it moves good post cheers and welcome to writers cafe

Stay crazy Gonzo

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You are a very good writer, but in my opinion, You should try putting some more emotion into your writing. You want to leave the reader with a sense of emotion that they can ponder on. It's a good way to have people remember your writing better.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Your tears will never depart.
A nice write.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Hannah Jocks
Hannah Jocks

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K, My name is Hannah I'm 14 and I love to write mostly stories, books, and scripts but I am working on getting better with poetry. My favorite genres are Mystery, thriller, adventure and I LOVE twi.. more..

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