Finding my song

�Without the stones, the brook would have lost its song�

 

Around the pebbles,

Between the plants, I twist and

Turn, to find my song.

 

Reviews

[Moonlight]

Lovely Haiku. I'm so glad you entered this in the contest, otherwise I might not have stumbled upon it. A very pretty haiku, paints a nice picture in one's mind. I must say that the picture helps. :)
Just one thought - don't haikus have to contain at least one word in reference to any one of the four seasons? As far as I can remember, that is what my teacher taught me in high school and I've come across the concept a few times.
Once again, great haiku. Unfortunately, the contest doesn't end today - or we'd have a clear winner!!
-Moonlight

[windowguy]

You've depicted this marvellously. Sing on sweet River...

[Alaska Frost]

Very nice haiku! I love how you wrote it in first person. Thanks for sharing! Good luck in my contest!!! :)
-Alaska

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Congrats on your winning Haiku! Well done!

Author: Nancy Lee Shrader
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[Frances O'Neill]

Lovely haiku! It makes the brook come alive!

[Carole]

This is just beautiful, Caffiene. I think finding our song takes some twisting and turning, and some going through valleys and climbing mountains, but eventually we do find it. I love the picture you chose for this Haiku. Well done, girl! :-) Carole

[Melissa]

You know, you really made me stop and ponder this thought, without the stones the brooks would not sing melodious songs. Wonderful entry. The Contest ends June 15th. I will then announce the winners. Thank you for entering.

[Prose-full]

very nice...

[Lau Thiam Kok]

this piece is metaphorical. And the words have been chosen so well in this peice, like,
"pebbles", "plants", "twist", "turn", and "song".
you made the excellent choice in words! Thanks.

[Illegitimate Artist]

Lovely description. The picture only adds to the piece!