Game of stares

A dare to stare.
Contest begins.
His eyes seduce hers with his gaze.
She rebuts with fiery looks,
to snatch a hasty win,
but, she doesn't know that,
by that time,
he had already lost.
for he stood witness
to a whole new world,
in her lustrous eyes.
He wished to dwell deeper,
but, normalcy stormed in,
and he saw her eyes,
painted red,
still wide open,
pleading to succeed.
Just then,
a teardrop oozed out,
sliding down her cheek,
only to rest on his right hand.
He blinked.
She rejoiced, for the game was won.
He rejoiced, for his heart just lost.

- C Kumar
Sept 3 2015

Reviews

[Eddie Phillips]

There is so much said in these few words. I really enjoyed this piece.

[andrew mitchell]

The stares we produce to lure the catch! :)

[Willard Wells]

Nice vision of love from afar and the feelings within. Well done.

[Chirag Kumar]

Thanks Willard :)

[Edis Radoncic]

The imagery in this poem is spot on. Great job.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

A very cute account!
Adorable, eloquent and vivid!
Loved it, especially last 6 lines!
Very well done!

[Chirag Kumar]

Thanks for your appreciation Jyoti :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You are welcome.

[B]

Oh my god
I am officially freaking out

This is strange for me
i know exactly how this scene feels

Goosebumps everywhere right now

WaW

[Chirag Kumar]

Hehe. I am glad you liked it :)

[B]

I like where it takes me
I needed that
Thank you

[Mitali Shah]

Seems love is in the air with you my dear friend that thoroughly making you pen wonderful pieces. ;)

[Chirag Kumar]

Thanks dear :)

[wordman]

a beautiful love poem my friend !

[....................]

it's a win-win situation...eyes can be the downfall of a man's heart but we fall with grace...i love this...

[Chirag Kumar]

Thanks Ledrew :)

[AaronFreitas]

Awesome write... sometimes that first stare into her eyes is all it takes my friend :)

[Chirag Kumar]

Thanks Aaron :)