Us

Becky Payton and I

Many men are at times misled

as most could be thought of as blind

Measuring by what they won't do

instead of to whom they were kind

Attempting to build an empire

judging themselves by what they deny

Thinking them best who resist temptation

be it a crime for a man to cry

No hungered child is a lost soul

nor a beggar be taught how to live

By preaching morals to the poor

we take from whom we should give

Goodness is not what we won't do

nor a question of who we exclude

It is an unselfish act of Humanity

to see ourselves in those we include

Author's Note

How many times do we walk by those we could so easily help?

Reviews

[Charles]

Five stanzas of near perfect poetry. Each stanza is a self-contained lesson (parable) and they are tied together by the title and pictures. The styles of individual lines are consistently interesting (stilted language in some ways, archaic in other ways, but all working together for the overall effect of the theme). And, a good theme - God's work (if you think God needs an apostrophe to help His work, check line 16. Great work on this one.

[E.H. Monroe]

A glimmer of hope. Smashing the so called do gooders witha bag of s**t.
So mant preach the good fight but never sling some help.
Its closed doors, roll up your window and let the f****r freeze.
But you did your job cuz you slipped a quarter into a help me mug at the local dunkin donuts.
Burn em Tate,
Burn em all.

[Art]

Thoughts of truth...

nice...

[George Love]

Each stanza could stand on its own, yet they are woven together into a wonderful poem. Art on display here.

[Im His Daughter]

Winners have been Chosen in the Christian Poetry Contest.

The Winners are:

~ For The Best God Breathed Poem ~ Us by Tate Morgan

~ For The Best Inspirational Poem ` Little Razor Blade by jumbie's #1 fan

` For The Best Christian Poem ~ My Lord, My Life by PoetGirl http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/Christian-Poetry/12436/

I wish to Thank each & every person that entered the contest & ask that God pours a multitude of Blessings on each one of you!

Thanks!

Im His Daughter

[Mark]

A really extraordinary insight Tate. The other reviewers have already used up all my flowery phraseology, though, but, man!, you surely know how to get at the heart of the matter--I've read very few who can so fluently distill an exemplary poem out of a complex issue! Masterful job, pard!

[Ellen Hammond]

Wow! I have read and re-read this over and over. Each stanza is a lesson in itself and together they speak volumes. Thank you for sharing this wonderful work with us. I think it needs to be posted and read, in all public places including...no especially...in the various religious institutions. It is wonderful to meet someone who has the eyes to see, the wisdom to understand, and the courage to speak up rather than hunching your shoulders or jumping on some religious bandwagon. I have often said we should live our faith by loving ALL others, and helping those we can without judging and preaching at people.

Obviously, I love the content of this poem. But, I also like your rhyming scheme too. Well done! I look forward to reading more of your work when I can.

[Tony]

So it is not actions that allow us to transcend, but spirit. Right?

[the_stoic]

thanks sir for asking me to stop by and have a read cause once again i am blown away by your sheer thoughtfulness . right from the amazing images that build up an imagery by themselves to the end that simply encapsulates all that you try to say . the way you think about the society as a whole is creditable cause very few of us do that these days . just a glitch that i felt - in the first line it would be better if you put it as 'at times misled' . thanks for sharing

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Congrats on your great winning song.

[EmpressPoetess]

This is the reason Christ came, this is what he came to teach us, there is more joy in giving of one's self, than in receiving! And to live this is sooo true! Brilliant, profound write!