Day is Night

A nightmare about being alone

What I am none seems to know

my friends leave me by the many

I am the consumption of my dreams

till I find I haven't realized any

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Into the nothing of the noise

surrounding us all the where

A life of waking dreams abides

a living breathing nightmare

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My days are raging shipwrecks

on the tumultuous waves of life

Scattered as to the four winds

upon the rocks that are my strife

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I long for the days of childhood

when friends were like my brothers

Strength of virtue crowned my head

loved and untouched by any others

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Certain purpose was my goal

no question on the morrow

I woke to conscience that was clear

courage and faith I didn't borrow

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Now the dawn speaks of the dark

closing in upon my soul

With every day I linger on

my life rages out of control

Reviews

[emmajoy]

What a wonderful picture! Like your poem it has a dark, brooding atmosphere, the gradual extinguishing of the human spirit. I so want to light a candle and have it flicker your thoughts into something lighter.

Grand meter and use of words, sad, sad, sad thoughts and wishes.

[Jazique]

wow. That ver deep to the spirit, wonderfully written with so much to say as it gose through my mind.

[R J Askew]

My this is a sombre one indeed. I sense you have come through your shadows to arrive at your life view. Having said that at least to an outside reader's eye, there is a beauty in this, esp the first line of verse three. I really like that, tis very expressive and i am sure many who live or have lived chaotic lives for whatever reason will nod there heads in agreement. Verse four is a heartfelt cry for early innocence. And I like the last line of verse five. So many now turn to self-help books and other crutches to try and re-find themselves, or turn to booze or some other distraction to buck themselves up. The last line is just how it is for many.

[the_stoic]

an unknown reader won't believe that it's the same poet who juggles so easily between poignant and cheerful writes .. felt just what Emma did .

[dovetailer]

it just takes a little light to dispel a lot of darkness....I try to look for that every day...
Gloom and I are on a first name basis...lol
I keep looking for the light at the end of the tunnel...it always comes...

[alice]

Great Imagery and really thoughtful. As always, I feel that you're a kindred spirit and understand me the most. :)

[tynamite]

You are really good at expressing loneliness.

[Dark Empress]

Wow Tate, this is an amazing poem. I love it, great write. Keep it up, your work is beautiful. :) thanks for sharing.

[JanieB]

That is so beautifully written..just lovely.

[Shante Payne]

I loved every bit of us, and who can't relate. There are times when we all let the dark hold us and I am grateful for it brings great work from us like your poem here. However I am also grateful that those feelings shall someday pass and I have hope that the guy on the path (in the picture) is walking toward a brighter day. Great write.

[Kristen R. Heyl]

The vision you provided of those dark times is one that I know. It is a struggle to feel as though the dark will ever end but you have to keep going and try to smile your way through it.