After Earth

7 verse Haiku

I stand awaiting

Before the Holy Savior.

Rising... He ponders.

Descend or Ascend?

Pearly gates? Fiery Vault?

The question of fate.

My story is placed

Upon the table of truth

For the Father’s eyes.

Saint?.. Certainly not.

Sinner?.. Definitely so,

But hurrah, there’s hope.

He rests inside me,

Washing away my evils

And imperfections

Something considered

By the King of the Heavens,

Mercy is within,

Smiling he says,

“Go forth my child. Arise,

You have earned your wings!"

Author's Note

Please feel free to be as constructively honest as you wish. Any suggestions or corrections are much appreciated. Do not rate or review based on opinion or subject of this piece. If you would like the favor returned please send me a read request or a message with the piece you wish for me to review! Happy writing :D

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

Oh I love this. I write a lot of "Godpoems" but most aren't upbeat. Most are whiney complainy things. This one has a wonderful lift to it. Well done.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Tricia Pattinson]

Nice poem. Brought a smile!

[hardeep sabharwal]

Welldone,, I feel its a difficult thing to write with in the boundaries of a special style and you have done well

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you very much

[hardeep sabharwal]

you are very welcome

[Steve L.]

Nicely done!! Difficult to stick within the parameters! Powerful stuff!!

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you :D

[Mila]

Hey! I'm not a poet person, so I cannot claim to have any insightful criticism where poetry is concerned. This read very nicely and the meanings were very clear. If I could mention anything constructive for you, it would probably be to keep your ellipses consistent, in that if you have "..." as an ellipses, keep it so instead of going to ".." in the lines following. That may just be my own nitpick, though.
The poem was a good read, though. Well done! :)

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you for reviewing :D

[Beccy]

Perfect lines to read on this Sunday. Faith is never judged by the faithful.

Beccy.

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you for reading :D

[MomzillaNC]

Interesting look at the Judgment.

NOTE: "Simpering" means smiling in a silly, ingratiating way. I find it difficult to imagine God "simpering" at anyone.

[Briana O'Connor]

dang thesaurus really needs to put the definition next to the words!

[MomzillaNC]

Thesaurus.com does. At the top of the page, there's a link that opens a new page with the definition of the word the Thesaurus is matching.

[Briana O'Connor]

wow...I didn't know you could click on those...I'm such a dummy head :P

[MomzillaNC]

:D We all have our "Doi!" moments.

[Briana O'Connor]

Lol I have too many to count!

[Rocans]

Nice, refreshing read. Thanks for sharing.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Rana]

A precious piece of poetry praising the merciful nature of the the Savior, reminding people to do their best.. Its lovely, but only, in the 4th stanza, instead of 'alas' (grief), a different interjection could be used.. Just that..

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you :D

[AngelOfChaos]

Wow..this poem is really beautiful

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you :D

[AngelOfChaos]

Your welcome